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Integrated speaking 3-3)A Student Government Announcement The Student Government Association, SGA, has decided they would like to sponsor a Person of the Year award at the university. This award is for a teacher, student, or member of the staff who has m v.1

Integrated speaking 3-3)A Student Government Announcement The Student Government Association, SGA, has decided they would like to sponsor a Person of the Year award at the university. This award is for a teacher, student, or member of the staff who has m v. 1
Children, at a very early age, are susceptible to the world around them. They cannot differentiate good and bad. Thus, many a parents want to pull the harness on their children from really a tender age. By contrast, others opine that children need liberty to be a complete nevertheless, I am of the honest opinion that the combination of government and independence is a better approach than emphasizing any one of the two. Admittedly, it is the onus on parents to guide and curb their toddlers so that they can act in a proper manner. Parents should instill the ethics and values in their children. More importantly, the restriction is needed to teach them about submission. To give an illustration, in our lives, each and everybody has to submit himself to some kind of authority. People are controlled and obey discipline in order to avert chaos. Therefore, parents should set rules to manage young children and provide them with limits that what they can and cannot do. This in turn that young children are like clay and you can shape the form you like to. On the flip side, freedom makes young children's self-reliant. It provides children with the opportunity of exploring mistakes by themselves and solves issues on their own way. When children can solve problems alone, they would be more confident that will fuel self-esteem. Another key thing to remember, creativity is very vital for all of us. And a child would be created only when he is allowed to make his own choice and do things in their own approach. Hence, parents should ensure a positive environment so that their children can hone their creative skills. Based on aforementioned arguments, I would like to say that independence and oversight are the linchpin in parenting. Toddlers are like clay that parents can form the shape as they wish. Despite, restriction can make the rebellious. So, what I want to say is that young children need liberty and supervise in a proper proportion.
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Children
, at a
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very
early age, are susceptible to the world around them. They cannot differentiate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and
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bad
.
Thus
,
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many
a
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parents
want to pull the harness on their
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children
from
really
a tender age. By contrast, others opine that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
need liberty to be a complete
nevertheless
, I am of the honest opinion that the combination of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and independence is a better approach than emphasizing any one of the two.

Admittedly
, it is the onus on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to guide and curb their toddlers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can act
Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with the adverb for "proper"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a proper manner
.
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Parents
should instill the ethics and values in their
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children
. More
importantly
, the restriction
is needed
to teach them about submission. To give an illustration, in our
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lives
, each and everybody
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has to
submit himself to
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some
kind of authority.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
are controlled
and obey discipline in order to avert chaos.
Therefore
,
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parents
should set
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
to manage
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young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and provide them with limits that what they can and cannot do. This in turn that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are like clay and you can shape the form you like to.

On the flip side, freedom
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
children's self-reliant. It provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
with the opportunity of exploring mistakes by themselves and solves issues on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
way. When
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children
can solve problems alone, they would be more confident that will fuel self-esteem. Another key thing to remember, creativity is
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very
vital for all of us. And a child would
be created
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only
when he is
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allowed
to
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make
his
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own
choice and do things in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
approach.
Hence
,
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parents
should ensure a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
environment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can hone their creative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

Based on aforementioned arguments, I would like to say that independence and oversight are the linchpin in parenting. Toddlers are like clay that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
can form the shape as they wish. Despite, restriction can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the rebellious.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, what I want to say is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
need liberty and supervise in a proper proportion.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Integrated speaking 3-3)A Student Government Announcement The Student Government Association, SGA, has decided they would like to sponsor a Person of the Year award at the university. This award is for a teacher, student, or member of the staff who has m v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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