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Integrated Quest 6: Using the main points and examples from the talk, describe the two major systems of the laboratory microscope, and then explain how to use it. v.1

Integrated Quest 6: Using the main points and examples from the talk, describe the two major systems of the laboratory microscope, and then explain how to use it. v. 1
Light motor vehicles that consume fossil fuels are ought to be eliminated from the roads and increase the usage of electric cars instead. In my opinion, I completely agree with this because it will reduce the pollution and can conserve the marine habitat. To begin with, the primary reason to get rid of cars that burn fossil fuels is that it will drastically reduce the air pollution in the atmosphere. Greenhouse gas is the major component which leads global warming and motor cars are the grave cause for that. In fact, out of total greenhouse gases in the environment, 60% are the aftereffect of burned fossil fuels. For instance, a survey on global warming conducted by the University of Berlin concludes its report by urging the people to refrain the use of fossil fuel in order to have a sustainable world. Another vital concern to encourage people to use automobiles, which run by electricity is that it could preserve the ocean life territory. In other words, marine has a major share in fossil fuel mining and it has affected the life circle its inhabitants. Therefore, the only way to sustain the ocean environment is by wiping out the fuel mining. A documentary called Our Planet on Netflix, for example, shows the seriousness of changes in the ocean and the number of its livings what it was like a decade ago. To conclude, in order to have a sustainable life for both humans and the living things in the sea, fossil fuel has to be eliminated and people should consider using electric cars for a better future.
Light motor vehicles that consume
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fossil
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fuels
are ought to
be eliminated
from the roads and increase the usage of electric
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cars
instead
. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with this
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because
it will
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reduce
the pollution and can conserve the marine habitat.

To
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begin
with, the primary reason to
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get
rid of
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cars
that burn
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fossil
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fuels
is that it will
drastically
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reduce
the air pollution in the atmosphere. Greenhouse gas is the major component which leads global warming and motor
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cars
are the grave cause for that. In fact, out of total greenhouse gases in the environment, 60% are the aftereffect of burned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
For instance
, a survey on global warming conducted by the University of Berlin concludes its report by urging the
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people
to refrain the
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use
of
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fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
in order to have a sustainable world.

Another vital concern to encourage
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people
to
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use
automobiles, which run by electricity is that it could preserve the ocean life territory.
In other words
, marine has a major share in
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fossil
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fuel
mining and it has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
the life circle its inhabitants.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way to sustain the ocean environment is by wiping out the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
mining. A documentary called Our Planet on Netflix,
for example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the seriousness of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the ocean and the number of its livings what it was like a decade ago.

To conclude
, in order to have a sustainable life for both humans and the living things in the sea,
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fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
be eliminated
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should consider using electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
for a better future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Integrated Quest 6: Using the main points and examples from the talk, describe the two major systems of the laboratory microscope, and then explain how to use it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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