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Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay tuition fees themselves. v. 1
It is observed in some nation that the investigation of the convict that are conducted in the jury are telecasted on TV for the people to see the law. In my opinion, the drawbacks of showing the trials in the media like becoming famous personality are eclipsed by its benefits such as reducing the crime rate. The major advantage of telecasting the criminals on trials will minimise the wrongdoing in the countries. In other words, people will get to know the punishment for crimes when they have an opportunity to see the cases in the television. Moreover, it will aid to reduce the crime when they know the severity of the trial. For example, based on the felony, the penalty is severe in the UAE and it is shown in the TV to the general public and hence there is no crime in the Arab countries. I believe, this example is the most obvious reason to show the enquiry and judgement on television. As far the drawbacks are concerned, the predominant disadvantage is that they will become a celebrity when they are shown on TV. That is because until the judgement is reserved they will be shown in the TV and it will create a negative influence for the children to take them as a role model and start doing the crimes at a young age and try to get the wrong popularity overnight. For instance, 10% of youngsters disobey the law and caught in the crime makes them feel proud that their faces are shown in the television which set a wrong attitude and spoil their future. However, in my opinion, 90% of the populace know the law and the way to protect them by not committing any crimes. In conclusion, the demerits of watching trials in the TV such as limelight face are overshadowed by the merits of minimal issues in the nation.
It
is observed
in
some
nation that the investigation of the convict that
are conducted
in the jury are
telecasted
on TV for the
people
to
see
the law. In my opinion, the drawbacks of showing the
trials
in the media like becoming
famous
personality
are eclipsed
by its benefits such as reducing the
crime
rate.

The major advantage of telecasting the criminals on
trials
will
minimise
the wrongdoing in the countries.
In other words
,
people
will
get
to know the punishment for
crimes
when they have an opportunity to
see
the cases
in the television
.
Moreover
, it will aid to
reduce
the
crime
when they know the severity of the
trial
.
For example
, based on the felony, the penalty is severe in the UAE and it
is shown
in the TV
to the
general public
and
hence
there is no
crime
in the Arab countries. I believe, this example is the most obvious reason to
show
the
enquiry
and judgement on television.

As far the drawbacks
are concerned
, the predominant disadvantage is that they will become a celebrity when they
are shown
on TV.
That is
because
until the judgement
is reserved
they will
be shown
in the TV
and it will create a
negative
influence for the children to take them as a role model and
start
doing the
crimes
at a young age and try to
get
the
wrong
popularity overnight.
For instance
, 10% of youngsters disobey the law and caught in the
crime
makes
them feel proud that their faces
are shown
in the television
which set a
wrong
attitude and spoil their future.
However
, in my opinion, 90% of the populace know the law and the way to protect them by not committing any crimes.

In conclusion
, the demerits of watching
trials
in the TV
such as limelight face
are overshadowed
by the merits of minimal issues in the nation.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay tuition fees themselves. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
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