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Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v.1

Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v. 1
In recent times there has been an increase in the drive to obtain higher education. As a result of this, some people are of the school of thought that Campus studies provide the best learning outcome as compared to web based studies. In my own opinion brick and mortar based learning offers the most effective channel for knowledge acquisition than its web based counterpart. Admittedly, the internet offers the flexibility of time whilst studying. This is because people who do online study are able to study at the most convenient period of the day they desire to do so. The result of this is that they are able to do other things outside of their study period which is not cast in stone. In addition, participants of web based learning are able to do so at their own pace. They can decide to take their time and complete a course of study at an extended period with little or no consequence. A positive for the student could be a better learning outcome since he spends more time on a particular subject than his compatriots on Campus. Additionally, Online study provides participants the added benefit of combining study whilst working. Nevertheless, there are a number of drawbacks to be considered. Practical and hands-on based learning, for example, engineering programmes are better appreciated when studied in the classroom and or laboratory. This is because the machines involved are better appreciated when seen and interacted with. In contrast, a virtual display is what an online study could offer at best. More so, exams administered under online studies are not effectively supervised as the student are left on their own to access all and any material available. This can result to the problem of plagiarism. In conclusion, despite the seeming effectiveness of online studies via time, pace and work, Campus study offer a better learning outcome.
In recent
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there has been an increase in the drive to obtain higher education.
As a result
of this,
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some
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people
are of the school of
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thought
that Campus
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studies
provide the best
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learning
outcome as compared to web based
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studies
. In my
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own
opinion brick and mortar based
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learning
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offers
the most effective channel for knowledge acquisition than its web based counterpart.

Admittedly
, the internet
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offers
the flexibility of
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time
whilst studying. This is
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because
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people
who do
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online
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study
are able to
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study
at the most convenient period of the day they desire to do
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so
. The result of this is that they are able to do other things
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outside of
their
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study
period which is not cast in stone.
In addition
, participants of web based
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learning
are able to do
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so
at their
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own
pace. They can decide to take their
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time
and complete a course of
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study
at an extended period with
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little
or no consequence. A
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positive
for the student could be a
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better
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learning
outcome since he spends more
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time
on a particular subject than his compatriots on Campus.
Additionally
,
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Online
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study
provides participants the
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added
benefit of combining
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study
whilst working.

Nevertheless
, there are a number of drawbacks to
be considered
. Practical and hands-on based
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learning
,
for example
, engineering
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programmes
are
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better
appreciated when studied in the classroom and or laboratory. This is
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because
the machines involved are
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better
appreciated when
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seen
and interacted with.
In contrast
, a virtual display is what an
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online
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study
could
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offer
at best. More
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so
, exams administered under
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online
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studies
are not
effectively
supervised as the student are
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left
on their
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own
to access all and any material available. This can result to the problem of plagiarism.

In conclusion
, despite the seeming effectiveness of
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online
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studies
via
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time
, pace and work, Campus
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study
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offer
a
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better
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learning
outcome.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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