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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, work and leisure activites. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relavant examples for your own knowledge and experience. v.1

Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, work and leisure activites. v. 1
In today’s world, it is evident that the use of computer systems and modern methods of communication are having a huge impact on our livelihood. Everything we do is influenced by new innovations. The essay would analyse whether the advantages of the revolution in computer systems and telecommunications outweigh its drawbacks and to what extent if true. The modern era has seen a technological revolution which has taken everyone by storm. Every aspect of human life is tremendously affected by advances in means of transferring information. Instantly, the computerized systems are used by many businesses to manage their bookkeeping. The implementation of these systems has resulted in better organization of business records and provides insights into business which were not possible earlier using manual bookkeeping methods. Moreover, it helps, the environment as less paper is used and most of the data are kept in hard disks. However, some argue, that the use of computerized systems has had a bad impact on the job market since less people are needed while doing the same job using a computerized system. Another obvious advantage is that modern communication methods have made the world a true global village. People living in different parts of the world can communicate with each other through a variety of methods like video calling, mobile, and various internet applications very cheaply. Variations in methods of communicating has encouraged people to settle in places far from their family and friends as they know that they can still stay in touch with them. In conclusion, we can safely say that the advantages of the influence of information technology on our daily lives overshadow the disadvantages it may have. With more advancement in technology these benefits will increase exponentially.
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today
’s world, it is evident that the
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use
of computer
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systems
and modern
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methods
of communication are having a huge impact on our livelihood. Everything we do
is influenced
by new innovations. The essay would
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analyse
whether the advantages of the revolution in computer
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systems
and telecommunications outweigh its drawbacks and to what extent if true.

The modern era has
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seen
a technological revolution which has taken everyone by storm. Every aspect of human life is
tremendously
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affected
by advances in means of transferring information.
Instantly
, the computerized
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systems
are
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used
by
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many
businesses to manage their bookkeeping. The implementation of these
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systems
has resulted in better organization of business records and provides insights into business which were not possible earlier using manual bookkeeping
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methods
.
Moreover
, it
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helps
, the environment as less paper is
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used
and most of the data are
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kept
in
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hard
disks.
However
,
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some
argue, that the
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use
of computerized
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systems
has had a
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bad
impact on the job market since
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less
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people
are needed
while doing the same job using a computerized system.

Another obvious advantage is that modern communication
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methods
have made the world a true global village.
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People
living in
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different
parts of the world can communicate with each other through a variety of
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methods
like video calling, mobile, and various internet applications
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very
cheaply
. Variations in
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methods
of communicating has encouraged
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people
to settle in places far from their family and friends as they know that they can
still
stay in touch with them.

In conclusion
, we can
safely
say that the advantages of the influence of information technology on our daily
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lives
overshadow the disadvantages it may have. With more advancement in technology these benefits will increase
exponentially
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, work and leisure activites. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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