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Some people believe that children should not given homework everyday. While other people believe that homework is essential to make them successful. Discuss both opinions and Give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that children should not given homework everyday. While other people believe that homework is essential to make them successful. v. 1
The assignment is the task given by the teachers in order to make the students disciplined. In addition to, give them purpose to achieve more in life. Some specialists think that daily assignments might ruin the child's desire to accomplish their educational path. While others think that homework that given in daily-basis might be extremely important to encourage and increase their ability to compete with their peers. That in turn will establish the spirit of working hard and assure them a successful life. No one could deny the importance of the homework in the education system. However, giving it to the children daily might be a controversial issue that is highly appreciated to be discussed. On one hand, I might agree with the opinion that encourages giving the child a daily task. However, it should not be in the same phase each time. For example, some days it could be a written essay about a certain topic, in other days it might be a field trip to certain areas, even it can be an observation to some historical or biological events. That technique will be extremely helpful to raise the awareness of the children and will be fun at the same time. Applying this technique is easy if the class is divided into several groups and the competition are fired between them with some trophies at the end of every week. On the other hand, my disagreement with the opinion that rejects giving the child's task daily might isolate them from school, they will start to turn their focus on some destructive ideas and might tend to an abject failure. To summerize, assignments are the tasks which connects the student's mind with school. It may differ along the educational levels, the type of the task and how they are given. However, giving homework in a daily-basis is helpful to increase the intellectual skills to the students and burn their desire to be more successful and productive in the future.
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ruin the child's desire to accomplish their educational path. While others
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think
that homework that
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given
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might
be
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important
to encourage and increase their ability to compete with their peers. That in turn will establish the spirit of working
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hard
and assure them a successful life.

No one could deny the importance of the homework in the education system.
However
,
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giving
it to the children
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daily
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might
be a controversial issue
that is
highly
appreciated to
be discussed
. On one hand, I
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might
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agree
with the opinion that encourages
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giving
the child a
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daily
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task
.
However
, it should not be in the same phase each time.
For example
,
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some
days it could be a written essay about a certain topic, in other days it
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might
be a field trip to certain areas, even it can be an observation to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
historical or biological
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
. That technique will be
extremely
helpful to raise the awareness of the children and will be fun at the same time. Applying this technique is easy if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
is divided
into several groups and the competition
are fired
between them with
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some
trophies at the
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end
of every week.

On the other hand
, my disagreement with the opinion that rejects
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giving
the child's
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task
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daily
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might
isolate them from school, they will
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start
to turn their focus on
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some
destructive
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ideas
and
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might
tend to an abject failure.

To
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summerize
, assignments are the
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tasks
which connects the student's mind with school. It may differ along the educational levels, the type of the
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task
and how they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
.
However
,
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giving
homework in a daily-basis is helpful to increase the intellectual
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skills
to the students and burn their desire to be more successful and productive in the future.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should not given homework everyday. While other people believe that homework is essential to make them successful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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