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Influence of human beings on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio diversity? What solution can you suggest v.1

Influence of human beings on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio diversity? What solution can you suggest v. 1
It has now become a heated topic of discussion that the human activities are burdening the global ecosystem which leads to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. There is a plethora of reasons behind the disappearance of the species and biodiversity loss. However, by taking some possible measures we can curb this growing issue. To embark with, Firstly the proliferating number of population is the major cause of threatening the species and biodiversity. Forest is recklessly cut off and transformed into societies to cater the housing needs of the growing population. Thus, deforestation leads to the extinction of many species of plants and animals. Secondly, due to pollution and global warming the atmosphere of the earth is deteriorating day by day, which results in making the environment, unhealthy for the survival of the species of plants and animal. For example, many species of aquatic animals are disappearing due to water pollution. Hence, all these activities are badly impacting the biodiversity. Nevertheless, by taking some measures we can put a cap on this rapidly increasing problem. The government should come up with some stringent punishments and put a legal ban on the builders for constructing the buildings in the forest belt areas. Consequently, we can save the forests. For instance, the India government has imposed hefty fines and strict punishments on the people indulge in the cutting of trees and hunting of animals under green India initiative. Additionally, the government should spread awareness among the masses to use renewable sources as alternatives to the non renewable sources to soak the growing pollution In conclusion, deforestation and pollution are the main reasons for the disappearance of the species and loss of biodiversity. Thus, by taking the above measures we can save the races of animals and plants and make the planet earth a beautiful place to live for all the creatures
It has
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now
become a heated topic of discussion that the human activities are burdening the global ecosystem which leads to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. There is a plethora of reasons behind the disappearance of the species and biodiversity loss.
However
, by taking
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some
possible measures we can curb this growing issue.

To embark with,
Firstly
the proliferating number of population is the major cause of threatening the species and biodiversity. Forest is
recklessly
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cut
off and transformed into societies to cater the housing needs of the growing population.
Thus
, deforestation leads to the extinction of
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many
species of plants and
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animals
.
Secondly
, due to pollution and global warming the atmosphere of the earth is deteriorating day by day, which results in making the environment, unhealthy for the survival of the species of plants and
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animal
.
For example
,
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many
species of aquatic
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animals
are disappearing due to water pollution.
Hence
, all these activities are
badly
impacting the biodiversity.

Nevertheless
, by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures we can put a cap on this
rapidly
increasing problem. The
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government
should
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come
up with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
stringent punishments and put a legal ban on the builders for constructing the buildings in the forest belt areas.
Consequently
, we can save the forests.
For instance
, the India
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has imposed hefty fines and strict punishments on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
indulge in the cutting of trees and hunting of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
under green India initiative.
Additionally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should spread awareness among the masses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
renewable sources as alternatives to the
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non renewable
sources to soak the growing pollution

In conclusion
, deforestation and pollution are the main reasons for the disappearance of the species and loss of biodiversity.
Thus
, by taking the above measures we can save the races of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and plants and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the planet earth a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
place to
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live
for all the creatures
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Influence of human beings on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio diversity? What solution can you suggest v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
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