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Individuals sometimes experience a contradiction between their actions and their beliefs-between what they are doing and what they believe they should be doing. These contradictions can cause a kind of mental discomfort known as cognitive dissonance. Peop v.1

Individuals sometimes experience a contradiction between their actions and their beliefs-between what they are doing and what they believe they should be doing. These contradictions can cause a kind of mental discomfort known as cognitive dissonance. Peop v. 1
The damage to the atmosphere is increasing at an alarming rate mainly due to human activities. Even though a great deal of effort is now being made by governments all over the world, individuals also have a major part to play in minimizing global environmental hazard. To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled usage of automobiles. If individuals can make a conscious effort to change their lifestyle, by cutting down the practice of private cars and use public transport, it would substantially reduce the burning of fossil fuels. In other words, a serious attempt could be made by individuals to travel to work regularly by buses and trains, which are cheap and abundant. Hence, Individual perceptive towards using these transports could help in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and thereby playing a vital role in addressing this issue. In addition to this, an individual could play a significant role in the safety of our ecosystem by managing an enormous amount of plastic in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil. In other words, almost every consumer utilise plastics while doing shopping, and there is always use and throw culture. Instead of practising this, Individual efforts could be taken into account, opting for Eco-friendly substitutes. For example, people can utilise paper and cloth bags instead of plastic in supermarkets. So, the usage of plastics on the environment is devastating and must find alternatives to plastic from the individual perceptive. In conclusion, it seems to me that environmental problem is the worrying concern and individuals have a crucial role in joining hands with the government in reducing the harm caused to the surrounding. Lack of individual participation could mean that addressing the environmental issue is beyond reach.
The damage to the atmosphere is increasing at an alarming rate
mainly
due to human activities.
Even though
a great deal of effort is
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now
being made
by
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governments
all over the world,
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individuals
also
have a major part to play in minimizing global environmental hazard.

To
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begin
with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled usage of automobiles. If
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individuals
can
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make
a conscious effort to
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change
their lifestyle, by cutting down the practice of private cars and
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use
public transport, it would
substantially
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reduce
the burning of fossil fuels.
In other words
, a serious attempt could
be made
by
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individuals
to travel to work
regularly
by buses and trains, which are
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cheap
and abundant.
Hence
,
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Individual
perceptive towards using these transports could
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help
in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and thereby playing a vital role in addressing this issue.

In addition
to this, an
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individual
could play a significant role in the safety of our ecosystem by managing an enormous amount of
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plastic
in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil.
In other words
, almost every consumer
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utilise
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plastics
while
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doing shopping
, and there is always
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use
and throw culture.
Instead
of
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practising
this,
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Individual
efforts could
be taken
into account, opting for Eco-friendly substitutes.
For example
,
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people
can
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utilise
paper and cloth bags
instead
of
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plastic
in supermarkets.
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So
, the usage of
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plastics
on the environment is devastating and
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must
find alternatives to
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plastic
from the
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individual
perceptive.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that environmental problem is the worrying concern and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
have a crucial role in joining hands with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in reducing the harm caused to the surrounding. Lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
participation could mean that addressing the environmental issue is beyond reach.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Individuals sometimes experience a contradiction between their actions and their beliefs-between what they are doing and what they believe they should be doing. These contradictions can cause a kind of mental discomfort known as cognitive dissonance. Peop v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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