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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.9

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 9
The rapid technological advancements over the last century have come at the cost of a briskly deteriorating environment around us. Many think that only governments and large companies can help alleviate this problem. However, I disagree with this notion and think that individuals have an equally vital role to play in improving the environment. Government alone cannot do anything unless people follow regulations and do little things on their part too. There are various ways in which individuals can contribute to a cleaner and healthier environment. Moreover, these measures do not require an extraordinary amount of effort. Instead, they are just slight modifications in our daily way of living. Firstly, people can choose to prefer public transport over private transport. Many people own cars and go to work in their cars. By choosing public transport, the pollution causing emissions from cars can be reduced. An example of this could be finding out the routes of the local transport companies and finding the best suitable option for you to go to work. Secondly, the most important thing that can be done is to plant trees. Planting trees is critical as it helps clean the environment and most importantly adds oxygen to the atmosphere. Most of the houses nowadays have lawns either inside or outside the house. A relevant practice could be to have more plants in one’s lawn. Thirdly, usage of plastic bags should also be avoided. Instead, use of more environmentally friendly bags that are biodegradable should be done. An example could be that a certain mart or superstore owner can replace the plastic bags in their shop with paper bags or d2o biodegradable bags. In conclusion, it can be said that even though the bigger action like policy formation or introducing regulations, has to be done on the part of the government or large companies; however, the responsibility of a cleaner environment cannot solely be put on these two. We as individuals of the environment that we live in have an equally vital role to play. Even the slightest of actions when taken by everybody can pile up and have a significant impact in helping improve our environment.
The rapid technological advancements over the last century have
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come
at the cost of a
briskly
deteriorating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
around us.
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Many
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think
that
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only
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governments
and large
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companies
can
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help
alleviate this problem.
However
, I disagree with this notion and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that individuals have an
equally
vital role to play in improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
alone cannot do anything unless
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
follow regulations and do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
things on their part too.

There are various ways in which individuals can contribute to a cleaner and healthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
Moreover
, these measures do not require an extraordinary amount of effort.
Instead
, they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
slight modifications in our daily way of living.

Firstly
,
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people
can choose to prefer public
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transport
over private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
cars and go to work in their cars. By choosing public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
, the pollution causing emissions from cars can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
. An example of this could be finding out the routes of the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and finding the best suitable option for you to go to work.

Secondly
, the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
thing that can
be done
is to plant trees. Planting trees is critical as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
clean the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and most
importantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
oxygen to the atmosphere. Most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
nowadays have lawns either inside or outside the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. A relevant practice could be to have more plants in one’s lawn.

Thirdly
, usage of plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
should
also
be avoided
.
Instead
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of more
environmentally
friendly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
that are biodegradable should
be done
. An example could be that a certain mart or superstore owner can replace the plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
in their shop with paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
or d2o biodegradable bags.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that
even though
the bigger action like policy formation or introducing regulations,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
be done
on the part of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
or large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
;
however
, the responsibility of a cleaner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
cannot
solely
be put
on these two. We as individuals of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in have an
equally
vital role to play. Even the slightest of actions when taken by everybody can pile up and have a significant impact in helping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 9

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
359 words
6
Overall Band Score
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