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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.38

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 38
It is thought that only governments and large industries can cause a change in the environment with the members of the society having no roles to play. In my opinion, although authorities of a county and large businesses can make major impacts on preserving the environment, I do not agree that individuals can do nothing On the one hand, supporters of the view that only governments and large companies can bring about major differences believe so because of the resources available to them, alongside the cooperation with different organisations that assist in preserving the surroundings. To illustrate, although most of these businesses release an enormous amount of wastes into inappropriate places such as water, they also take steps to contact different bodies that can help reduce the effects of these wastes by converting them into other useful substances. Consequently, people are led to believe that individuals have no capacity to carry out such tasks. However, I believe that individuals have several roles to perform in maintaining the growth of the environment. Firstly, their knowledge and awareness of degrading factors in the surroundings aid in combating the factors. . For instance, the idea of plastic wastes being non-biodegradable, and often released into water bodies has propelled residents in a small town in Zambia to rid large rivers of these wastes while preserving aquatic life. Additionally, deforestation, which is a major cause of global warming is now being tackled at an individual level. For example, students of the department of Agriculture at the University of Ibadan, Nigeria now plant trees for each one fell. As a result, the effects of deforestation are reduced. In conclusion, while nations and large industries may take several steps to improve the surroundings, I believe that individuals have a place in making a difference, if given the opportunity. It is hoped that more people will engage in environmental preservation.
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thought
that
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only
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governments
and
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large
industries can cause a
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change
in the environment with the members of the society having no roles to play. In my opinion, although authorities of a county and
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large
businesses can
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make
major impacts on preserving the environment, I do not
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agree
that
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individuals
can do
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nothing


On the one hand, supporters of the view that
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only
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governments
and
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large
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companies
can bring about major differences
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believe
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so
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because
of the resources available to them, alongside the cooperation with
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different
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organisations
that assist in preserving the surroundings. To illustrate, although most of these businesses release an enormous amount of
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wastes
into inappropriate places such as water, they
also
take steps to contact
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different
bodies that can
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help
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reduce
the effects of these
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wastes
by converting them into other useful substances.
Consequently
,
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people
are led
to
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believe
that
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individuals
have no capacity to carry out such tasks.

However
, I
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believe
that
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individuals
have several roles to perform in maintaining the growth of the environment.
Firstly
, their knowledge and awareness of degrading factors in the surroundings aid in combating the factors.
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.
For instance
, the
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idea
of plastic
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wastes
being non-biodegradable, and
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often
released into water bodies has propelled residents in a
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small
town in Zambia to rid
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large
rivers of these
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wastes
while preserving aquatic life.
Additionally
, deforestation, which is a major cause of global warming is
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now
being tackled
at an
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individual
level.
For example
, students of the department of Agriculture at the University of Ibadan, Nigeria
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now
plant trees for each one fell.
As a result
, the effects of deforestation are
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reduced
.

In conclusion
, while nations and
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large
industries may take several steps to
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improve
the surroundings, I
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believe
that
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individuals
have a place in making a difference, if
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given
the opportunity. It
is hoped
that more
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people
will engage in environmental preservation.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 38

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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