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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.29

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 29
Nowadays, environmental problems are global issues the government in all nations across the globe desires to implement appropriate methods to tackle. While it is believed that only large firms and the authority have enough ability to solve it, I advocate that the roles of each individual are also of great importance. There are some sound reasons why the large businesses and the government play essential roles in solutions of environmental issues. The first explanation is that they have plenty financial resources from profits and taxation. That is the reason why it is impossible for them to allocate their budgets to environmentally friendly approaches, including optimizing the use of renewable energy and using bio-degraded material for the sake of production. Other than that, harsh punishment which only the government is entitled to introduce can deter citizens from the deterioration of the environment. This is because no one wants to be faced with stringent penalties such as incarceration or a heavy fine. Besides, the effects of citizens also need to be taken into consideration for some compelling reasons. First of all, awareness and cooperation of people are the key factors for the protection of the environment. For example, if the government facilitates the development of the public transportation, which reduces carbon emissions from private vehicles, but citizens refuse to use it, the volume of atmospheric greenhouse gases will continue to soar. Moreover, the voices of the public are powerful. That is the reason why when all of us boycott environmentally irresponsible companies, they have a tendency to change their attitudes and apply ecologically friendly methods to boost their sales. All in all, not only large companies and the government but also every person have to join in the conversation of the environment.
Nowadays, environmental problems are global issues the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
in all nations across the globe desires to implement appropriate methods to tackle. While it
is believed
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
large firms and the authority have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
ability to solve it, I advocate that the roles of each individual are
also
of great importance.

There are
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some
sound
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reasons
why the large businesses and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
play essential roles in solutions of environmental issues. The
first
explanation is that they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
financial resources from profits and taxation.
That is
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
why it is impossible for them to allocate their budgets to
environmentally
friendly approaches, including optimizing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of renewable energy and using bio-degraded material for the sake of production. Other than that, harsh punishment which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is entitled
to introduce can deter citizens from the deterioration of the environment. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
no one wants to
be faced
with stringent penalties such as incarceration or a heavy fine.

Besides
, the effects of citizens
also
need to
be taken
into consideration for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
compelling
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reasons
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, awareness and cooperation of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are the key factors for the protection of the environment.
For example
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
facilitates the development of the public transportation, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
carbon emissions from private vehicles,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
citizens refuse to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it, the volume of atmospheric greenhouse gases will continue to soar.
Moreover
, the voices of the public are powerful.
That is
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
why when all of us boycott
environmentally
irresponsible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, they have a tendency to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their attitudes and apply
ecologically
friendly methods to boost their sales.

All in all, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and the
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government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
every person
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
in the conversation of the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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