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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.24

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 24
The environment is one of the most serious problems in the 21st century. There are some ideas that each person can do nothing to ameliorate the situation, if people want to make a difference, then they will have to depend on the government and large companies. From my point of view, this is a wrong way to approach and improve the problems. Nowadays, many places on Earth have to deal with a lot of consequences happens because of the all the effects of the environment. Protect the earth is our responsibility, individuals can make a big difference. In some remote areas, many people don’t know that nylon takes a hundred years to decompose. In the modern world, things like plastic bags has become the essential item and cannot be replaced for many people. Despite of the convenient this is a biggest harmful resource to the world we’re living. In many places some people still think that the small garbage is not harmful for the environment and clearly they don’t know the real situation. In the latest years, polar ice melting, pollution, and other impacts have become the phenomenon problem. As a result, the environments have been destroyed dramatically. For example, if we reduced the number of plastic things, our planet would be greener and better and in the future we will be able to improve the environment. On the other hand, some companies could solve the problems. Many factories dump directly the waste into the river and the water supplies leading to many kinds of pollution. With reasonable measures large scale companies can make a difference. In some countries, with politics on environmental protection of the government, they have succeeded in reducing the amount of plastic waste and minimize the emissions by all the means of transport. Nowadays, in some developing countries, the government has tried to find alternative sources of plastic waste. As far as I can concerned, despite the governments and large scale companies influence, the situation will not improve without human action. Having said that, individuals can protect and save our planet.
The
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environment
is one of the most serious problems in the 21st century. There are
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some
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ideas
that each person can do nothing to ameliorate the situation, if
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people
want to
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make
a difference, then they will
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have to
depend on the
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government
and large
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companies
. From my point of view, this is a
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wrong
way to approach and
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improve
the problems.

Nowadays,
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many
places on Earth
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have to
deal with
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a lot of
consequences happens
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because
of the all the effects of the
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environment
. Protect the earth is our responsibility, individuals can
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make
a
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big
difference. In
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some
remote areas,
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many
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people
don’t know that nylon takes a hundred years to decompose. In the modern world, things like
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plastic
bags has become the essential item and cannot
be replaced
for
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many
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people
.
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Despite of
the convenient this is
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a
biggest harmful resource to the world we’re living. In
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many
places
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some
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people
still
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think
that the
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small
garbage is not harmful for the
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environment
and
clearly
they don’t know the real situation. In the latest years, polar ice melting, pollution, and other impacts have become the phenomenon problem.
As a result
, the
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environments
have been
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destroyed
dramatically
.
For example
, if we
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reduced
the number of
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plastic
things, our planet would be greener and better and in the future we will be able to
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improve
the environment.

On the other hand
,
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some
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companies
could solve the problems.
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Many
factories dump
directly
the waste into the river and the water supplies leading to
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many
kinds of pollution. With reasonable measures large scale
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companies
can
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make
a difference. In
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some
countries, with politics on environmental protection of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
, they have succeeded in reducing the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
waste and minimize the emissions by all the means of transport. Nowadays, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing countries
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has tried to find alternative sources of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
waste.

As far as I can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "concern"
concerned
, despite the
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governments
and large scale
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companies
influence, the situation will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
without human action. Having said that, individuals can protect and save our planet.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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