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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 19
Environmental issues have been raising every year all around the world. We humans should take responsible actions to ensure a safe and healthy world. Some people say that the governments and multinational companies are the only ones who can bring a change in the environment and that it is not possible for the individual to bring change in the environment. I completely disagree to this statement. The government or the companies do conduct certain environmental drives like cleaning the rivers and oceans, encouraging plantations for greener world and ensuring that the plastic used are being properly recycled. Moreover when such cleanup initiatives are started up on a large scale, there are likely to get infused in to the public and make them a part of their lifes. However it is also the equal responsibility of an individual to provide his support to the better environment in the world. If each and every individual takes responsibilities like planting trees, avoid littering the streets, minimizing the use of plastic in their life, then the can certainly be helpful in improving the environment. By sharing they stories for service they are providing, they can influence many others to take a responsible role in their life too. There are many cases where an individual has take a major step in the improvement of the environments. For instance, a man from India has been planting trees from the past 30 years creating a man-made forest. Now this forest has become home to many wild animals and it as also restored the nature in that area. Similarly a dutch inventor has came up with a project to clean up the ocean by collecting the plastic in it. There are many other individuals who have been working to improve the environment in their own ways. Finally i would like to say that, along with the government and the companies, it is the responsibility of the individuals also to protect the environment and provide a better world to the future
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. We humans should take responsible actions to ensure a safe and healthy world.

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ones who can bring a
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and that it is not possible for the
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to bring
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change
in the
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environment
. I completely disagree to this statement.

The
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government
or the
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companies
do conduct certain environmental drives like cleaning the rivers and oceans, encouraging plantations for greener
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world
and ensuring that the plastic
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used
are being
properly
recycled.
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Moreover
when such cleanup initiatives are
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started
up on a large scale, there are likely to
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get
infused in to the public and
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make
them a part of their
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However
it is
also
the equal responsibility of an
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individual
to provide his support to the better
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environment
in the
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world
. If each and every
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individual
takes responsibilities like planting trees, avoid littering the streets, minimizing the
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use
of plastic in their life, then the can
certainly
be helpful in improving the
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environment
. By sharing
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they stories
for service they are providing, they can influence
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others to take a responsible role in their life too.

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cases where an
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individual
has
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take
a major step in the improvement of the
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environments
.
For instance
, a
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man
from India has been planting trees from the past 30 years creating a
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man
-made forest.
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Now
this forest has become home to
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many
wild animals and it as
also
restored the nature in that area.

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Similarly
a dutch inventor has
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came
up with a project to clean up the ocean by collecting the plastic in it. There are
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many
other
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individuals
who have been working to
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improve
the
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environment
in their
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own
ways.

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Finally
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i
would like to say that, along with the
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government
and the
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companies
, it is the responsibility of the
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individuals
also
to protect the
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environment
and provide a better
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world
to the future
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.

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331 words
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