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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a big difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

It is argued that improving environmental quality is the responsibility of the government and large companies instead of the citizens. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this statement. On the one hand, many people strongly suppose that the responsibility for environmental protection totally belongs to the government and the environmental companies. The main reason is that only people who have authority in the state apparatus or in our lives can have enough power to make policies or strategies to preserve and improve the quality of the environment. For example, the prime minister can enact the law and require all the citizens to put the law in practice. Therefore, the role of authority and big companies are very essential in protecting and solving environment-related problems. On the other hand, I believe that dealing with environmental problems is not only the responsibility of the government but also the responsibility and the awareness of the inhabitants. Firstly, more brains are much better than only one brain. That means when the residents altogether solve the environmental issues, the air quality and other parts of the environment will be significantly improved. Moreover, the local people are the main labourers to follow the law enacted by the authority and the strategies of big companies. Without them, those policies and strategies cannot be put into practice and the quality of the environment may not be improved. For instance, when a new law is promulgated by the government but the citizens do not pay any attention to it, the issues of the environment cannot be solved completely. As a result, local citizens play an important role in dealing with environmental problems and improving the quality of the air. In conclusion, although many people strongly suppose that the role of authority and the big companies cannot be instead in dealing with problems of the environment, I totally believe that the combination between the inhabitants and the authority is the key to solving these environmental issues completely.
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is argued
that improving
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environmental
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quality
is the
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responsibility
of the
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government
and large
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companies
instead
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citizens
. In my opinion, I
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disagree with this statement.

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people
strongly
suppose that the
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environmental
protection
totally
belongs to the
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government
and the
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environmental
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companies
. The main reason is that
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people
who have
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authority
in the state apparatus or in our
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lives
can have
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enough
power to
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make
policies or strategies to preserve and
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improve
the
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quality
of the
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environment
.
For example
, the prime minister can enact the
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law
and require all the
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citizens
to put the
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law
in practice.
Therefore
, the role of
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authority
and
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big
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companies
are
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very
essential in protecting and solving environment-related problems.

On the other hand
, I believe that dealing with
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environmental
problems is not
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of the
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government
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also
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responsibility
and the awareness of the inhabitants.
Firstly
, more brains are much better than
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only
one brain. That means when the residents altogether solve the
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environmental
issues, the air
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quality
and other parts of the
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environment
will be
significantly
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improved
.
Moreover
, the local
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people
are the main
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labourers
to follow the
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law
enacted by the
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authority
and the strategies of
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big
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companies
. Without them, those policies and strategies cannot
be put
into practice and the
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quality
of the
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environment
may not be
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improved
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law
is promulgated
by the
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government
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the
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citizens
do not pay any attention to it, the issues of the
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environment
cannot
be solved
completely.
As a result
, local
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citizens
play an
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important
role in dealing with
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environmental
problems and improving the
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quality
of the air.

In conclusion
, although
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people
strongly
suppose that the role of
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and the
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companies
cannot be
instead
in dealing with problems of the
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environment
, I
totally
believe that the combination between the inhabitants and the
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authority
is the key to solving these
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environmental
issues completely.
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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