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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v.9

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v. 9
Traffic congestion and pollution are two pressing issues all over the world. As the majority of cars and bikes are petrol driven, elevating petrol price can reduce their numbers on the roads, and as a result, help control traffic congestions and pollution to a great extent, I believe. Unlike the past, when only rich people could afford automobiles, a majority of car and motorbike owners, these days, are from middle-class families. Therefore, a higher fuel cost will affect their budget, and many of them might opt-out using petroleum driven cars. Such surge in prices will increase the demand for public transportations which is by far the most efficient way to pull out the pollution and traffic jam problems. Moreover, such a price hike will make eco-friendly automobiles popular. For instance, electric cars, or CNG or LPG driven vehicles can become a viable option for consumers. Although it cannot reduce traffic problems, it can reduce pollutions effectively. Other solutions can also be considered instead of upscaling petroleum price only. To begin with, the government can implement policies to restrict the number of cars per family can own, and also offer subsidies to citizens to purchase electric cars. An odd-even approach can be implemented by states where number plates ending with odd numbers can use some roads during rush hours while cars with even number plates can run on other streets. Besides, citizens should change their mindset and help the authority in curbing traffic jams and pollutions. To conclude, increasing petrol price will open the doors for alternative options which can, directly and indirectly, combat both traffic and pollution problems. The government should make sure the petrol price does not hike the price of other necessary commodities.
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congestion and
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pollution
are two pressing issues all over the world. As the majority of
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cars
and bikes are
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petrol
driven, elevating
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petrol
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price
can
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reduce
their
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numbers
on the roads, and
as a result
,
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help
control
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traffic
congestions and
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pollution
to a great extent, I believe.

Unlike the past, when
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only
rich
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people
could afford automobiles, a majority of
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car
and motorbike owners, these days, are from middle-
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class
families.
Therefore
, a higher fuel cost will affect their budget, and
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many
of them might opt-out using petroleum driven
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cars
. Such surge in
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prices
will increase the demand for public transportations which is by far the most efficient way to pull out the
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pollution
and
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traffic
jam problems.

Moreover
, such a
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price
hike will
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make
eco-friendly automobiles popular.
For instance
, electric
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cars
, or CNG or LPG driven vehicles can become a viable option for consumers. Although it cannot
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reduce
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traffic
problems, it can
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reduce
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pollutions
effectively
.

Other solutions can
also
be considered
instead
of
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upscaling
petroleum
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price
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only
. To
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begin
with, the
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government
can implement policies to restrict the
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number
of
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cars
per family can
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own
, and
also
offer subsidies to citizens to
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purchase
electric cars.

An odd-even approach can
be implemented
by states where
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number
plates ending with odd
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numbers
can
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use
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some
roads during rush hours while
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cars
with even
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number
plates can run on other streets.
Besides
, citizens should
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change
their mindset and
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help
the authority in curbing
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traffic
jams and pollutions.

To conclude
, increasing
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petrol
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price
will open the doors for alternative options which can,
directly
and
indirectly
, combat both
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traffic
and
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pollution
problems. The
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government
should
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make
sure the
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petrol
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price
does not hike the
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price
of other necessary commodities.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v. 9

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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