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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v.8

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v. 8
Traffic and pollution have been being two major concerns worldwide lately. Several solutions have been proposed to deal with these problems, improving the price of petrol for example. However, whether or not it is effective is debatable. Yet, I personally agree with proposing a more expensive price of petrol to reduce traffic and pollution based on demanding point of view. To begin with, a classic economic theory clearly argues that the higher the price, the lower the demanding of a product and reversely. By increasing the price of petrol, more people may be more aware of using the vehicle considerably since they need to pay more to fill the tank. This idea can lead to a systematic approach to reducing traffic and air problem through declining possibilities of people to buy fuel needed to run their vehicle and this may result in reducing the number of transportation tool subsequently. For instance, Whitehorse city has imposed the expensive price of fuel and gas which influences the number of vehicles operating and as a result, it comes up as the cleanest air city of the world. Meanwhile, the other way to overcome traffic and pollution is by optimising public transportation. A good system of public vehicles accomplished by better infrastructure may be delightful to everyone and can attract individuals to use public transportation more often than their own vehicles. This idea certainly can minimise the amount of traffic and pollution as well. Mass rapid train in China and Japan, for example, sophisticated transport and well-managed train schedule have successfully brought up these countries in lessening traffic problem. All in all, a wide range of solutions is available to help cope with traffic and pollution problem. Improving fuel price and public transportations are true as proposed solutions.
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Traffic
and
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pollution
have been being two major concerns worldwide lately. Several solutions have
been proposed
to deal with these problems, improving the
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price
of petrol
for example
.
However
,
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
it is effective is debatable.
Yet
, I
personally
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agree
with proposing a more expensive
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price
of petrol to
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reduce
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traffic
and
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pollution
based on demanding point of view.

To
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begin
with, a classic economic theory
clearly
argues that the higher the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
, the lower the demanding of a product and
reversely
. By increasing the
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price
of petrol, more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
may be more aware of using the
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vehicle
considerably
since they need to pay more to fill the tank. This
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idea
can lead to a systematic approach to reducing
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traffic
and air problem through declining possibilities of
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people
to
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buy
fuel needed to run their
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vehicle
and this may result in reducing the number of
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transportation
tool
subsequently
.
For instance
, Whitehorse city has imposed the expensive
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price
of fuel and gas which influences the number of
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vehicles
operating and
as a result
, it
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comes
up as the cleanest air city of the world.

Meanwhile, the other way to overcome
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traffic
and
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pollution
is by
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optimising
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public
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transportation
. A
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good
system of
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public
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vehicles
accomplished by better infrastructure may be delightful to everyone and can attract individuals to
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use
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public
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transportation
more
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often
than their
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own
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vehicles
. This
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idea
certainly
can
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minimise
the amount of
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traffic
and
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pollution
as well
. Mass rapid train in China and Japan,
for example
, sophisticated transport and well-managed train schedule have
successfully
brought up these countries in lessening
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traffic
problem.

All in all, a wide range of solutions is available to
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help
cope with
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traffic
and
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pollution
problem. Improving fuel
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price
and
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public
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transportations
are true as proposed solutions.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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