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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.4

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 4
Some people say that to tackle traffic and contamination issues, the costs of petrol should be risen. In this essay I will explain why I completely agree with this and what strategies could be applied additionally. An effective measure to reduce pollution and the number of cars on the roads is to increase the price of petrochemicals, which are essential to the function of regular cars. In like manner, less people would use their private cars and more would use public transport to commute to work. Buses are highly more efficient and convenient than private cars as a larger amount of people can ride a bus than those driving a car. Another positive consequence of this measure is that not only private cars, but also lorries will be less used to take products from one city to another, diminishing consequently contamination and traffic on the streets. In addition to this measure, the government could provide bicycles to commute to work. For example, in these days, many cities around the world offer this service to get to and from downtown to neighbouring towns, reducing significantly, hence, the amount of cars and pollution of the air. Another primary strategy would be to increase the number of trains and rails to improve the exportation, importation and inner market of goods all throughout the country. In conclusion, increasing the cost of petrol is essential for the improvement of traffic and pollution problems. This, however, is not the only answer to this concern, providing alternative means of transport for people and goods is significantly important to address every side of the situation.
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people
say that to tackle traffic and contamination issues, the costs of petrol should
be risen
. In this essay I will
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explain
why I completely
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agree
with this and what strategies could
be applied
additionally
.

An effective measure to
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reduce
pollution and the number of
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cars
on the roads is to increase the price of petrochemicals, which are essential to the function of regular
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cars
. In like manner,
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less
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people
would
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use
their private
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cars
and more would
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use
public transport to commute to work. Buses are
highly
more efficient and convenient than private
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cars
as a larger amount of
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people
can ride a bus than those driving a
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car
. Another
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positive
consequence of this measure is that not
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only
private
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cars
,
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but
also
lorries will be less
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used
to take products from one city to another, diminishing
consequently
contamination and traffic on the streets.

In addition
to this measure, the
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government
could provide bicycles to commute to work.
For example
, in these days,
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many
cities around the world offer this service to
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get
to and from downtown to
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neighbouring
towns, reducing
significantly
,
hence
, the amount of
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cars
and pollution of the air. Another primary strategy would be to increase the number of trains and rails to
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improve
the exportation, importation and inner market of
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goods
all throughout the country.

In conclusion
, increasing the cost of petrol is essential for the improvement of traffic and pollution problems. This,
however
, is not the
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only
answer to this concern, providing alternative means of transport for
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people
and
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goods
is
significantly
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important
to address every side of the situation.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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