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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

A wide range of feasible measures have been proposed in an attempt to enhance the quality of air and mitigate traffic congestion problem. While I hold the view that an increase in the price of fuels can temporarily address these issues, there are some other remedies which could be more effective in the long run. There is a common fallacy that a rise in the cost of petrol could sustainably tackle challenges of air contamination and traffic congestion. An increased expense of petrol might well deter citizens from using their personal cars in the short term, but in the long run, inhabitants would almost certainly adapt to the new pricing system and use their personal vehicles as frequently, if not more. What causes this is that by a mere soar in the price of petrol the demand for transportation will not disappear, and a lack of more efficient, alternative policy tend to make inhabitants of a nation return to their former trends. For instance, by putting a higher price on gasoline in 2019, not only were not traffic or pollutant issues mitigated by Iranian government, but this country is currently experiencing more intense traffic jam as well as worse quality of air in major cities. This convinces me to believe more sustainable practices are required. In addressing the problem pollutants in the air pose, perhaps a more attainable policy would be appliance of cutting-edge pollution-free technologies by factories. As a result of this practice, the amount of greenhouse gases in exhaust fumes in factories will probably reduce, making them more environmentally friendly. Moreover, to address the challenge of intense traffic jam, a more viable option seems to be developing rail and subway systems. Trains are capable of transporting a vast number of passengers, and do not have to go through traffic lights and intersections. Benefited from these advantages, developed subway and railway would probably ensure less use of private vehicles, which may subsequently tackle the problem of traffic congestion successfully. In conclusion, in my opinion although setting a more expensive price on petrol may cause a temporary decreased levels of car usage among citizens, environmentally friendly technological advances in addition to developed subway and railway systems might well lead to more sustainable, favorable outcomes. @EWN_Admin #sample
A wide range of feasible measures have
been proposed
in an attempt to enhance the quality of
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air
and mitigate
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traffic
congestion problem. While I hold the view that an increase in the
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price
of fuels can
temporarily
address these issues, there are
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some
other remedies which could be more effective in the long run.

There is a common fallacy that a rise in the cost of
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petrol
could
sustainably
tackle challenges of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
contamination and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion. An increased expense of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
petrol
might well deter citizens from using their personal cars in the short term,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in the long run, inhabitants would almost
certainly
adapt to the new pricing system and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their personal vehicles as
frequently
, if not more. What causes this is that by a mere soar in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
petrol
the demand for transportation will not disappear, and a lack of more efficient, alternative policy tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
inhabitants of a nation return to their former trends.
For instance
, by putting a higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
on gasoline in 2019, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
were not
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traffic
or pollutant issues mitigated by Iranian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this country is
currently
experiencing more intense
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
jam
as well
as worse quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
in major cities. This convinces me to believe more sustainable practices
are required
.

In addressing the problem pollutants in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pose, perhaps a more attainable policy would be appliance of cutting-edge pollution-free technologies by factories.
As a result
of this practice, the amount of greenhouse gases in exhaust fumes in factories will
probably
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
, making them more
environmentally
friendly.
Moreover
, to address the challenge of intense
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
jam, a more viable option seems to be developing rail and subway systems. Trains are capable of transporting a vast number of passengers, and do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
lights and intersections. Benefited from these advantages, developed subway and railway would
probably
ensure less
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private vehicles, which may
subsequently
tackle the problem of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion
successfully
.

In conclusion
, in my opinion although setting a more expensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
petrol
may cause a temporary decreased levels of car usage among citizens,
environmentally
friendly technological advances
in addition
to developed subway and railway systems might well lead to more sustainable, favorable outcomes.

@EWN_Admin

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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. - - what other measures do you think might be effective?

Essay
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6 paragraphs
375 words
6.0
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