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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.9

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 9
The most effective means of resolving the growing problem of traffic and pollution is by raising the cost of fossil fuel. I totally agree with this view because it will lead to a decrease in the number of automobile on the roads. Also, constructing more roads and bridges is another excellent means to curb this menace. The reason why increasing the cost of petrol would resolve the problem of traffic and pollution is that there will be less cars on the roads. People may not cope with the high cost. Families with more than one car will have to either drive one car or make use of public transportation, thereby reducing gridlock and pollution caused by the release of carbon monoxide from the cars. For example, in 2011, the President of Nigeria, Goodluck Jonathan, abolished the payment of petrol subsidy. This act increased the price of fossil fuel from eighty seven naira to one hundred and forty five naira. Consequently, many people stopped using private cars. In addition, I consider the construction of more roads and bridges an excellent step in curbing this growing menace. In other words, better road networks and bridges would ensure free flow of movements because there will be alternative routes for commuters. Lagos State, for example, started the construction of roads and bridges in 2015, and this has helped to greatly reduce traffic congestion and pollutants in the air. In conclusion, I completely agree that the increase in petrol price will decrease the number of cars on the roads, and the construction of more roads and bridges is a useful step to curb the menace of traffic and pollution.
The most effective means of resolving the growing problem of
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traffic
and
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pollution
is by raising the cost of fossil fuel. I
totally
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agree
with this view
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because
it will lead to a decrease in the number of automobile on the
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roads
.
Also
, constructing more
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roads
and
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bridges
is another excellent means to curb this menace.

The reason why increasing the cost of petrol would resolve the problem of
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traffic
and
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pollution
is that there will be
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less
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cars
on the
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roads
.
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People
may not cope with the high cost. Families with more than one
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car
will
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have to
either drive one
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car
or
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make
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use
of public transportation, thereby reducing gridlock and
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pollution
caused by the release of carbon monoxide from the
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cars
.
For example
, in 2011, the President of Nigeria,
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Goodluck
Jonathan, abolished the payment of petrol subsidy. This act increased the price of fossil fuel from
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eighty seven
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naira
to one hundred and
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forty five
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naira
.
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many
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people
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stopped
using private cars.

In addition
, I consider the construction of more
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roads
and
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bridges
an excellent step in curbing this growing menace.
In other words
, better
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road
networks and
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bridges
would ensure free flow of movements
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because
there will be alternative routes for commuters. Lagos State,
for example
,
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started
the construction of
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roads
and
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bridges
in 2015, and this has
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helped
to
greatly
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reduce
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traffic
congestion and pollutants in the air.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that the increase in petrol price will decrease the number of
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cars
on the
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roads
, and the construction of more
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roads
and
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bridges
is a useful step to curb the menace of
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traffic
and
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pollution
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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