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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.19

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 19
There are lots of measures to address traffic and pollution problems. One of them, which is considered to be the ultimate way to solve is making fossil fuel prices more expensive. But, there is a drawback which is the effect on the increasing prices of other goods and products, too. Also, this isn’t seen to be a success. So, one alternative solution is a huge investment in electric vehicles. Effects of increased fuel price can be varied, but the increases of other goods are easily seen anywhere, from markets, supermarkets and even online shopping websites. For example, plastics that we use everyday are made of oil, some made of recycled plastics, and heat is used to make all of these things. If the fuel price is more expensive, the upkeep cost, too. Another reason is transportation costs, from ships, trucks and cargo planes. All of our goods need to be transferred from factories to supermarkets. And these transportation costs are always included in our price tags. Since most of our transporters still use petrol as their main fuel in order to run the whole process. Increasing the petrol price will definitely affect these businesses and, of course, our money spent on goods. One way to solve traffic and especially pollution without causing any consequences is investing our taxpayers’ money on green energy and electric cars. These can provide choices to transportation businesses e. g. , electric-driven trucks and even cargo drones run solely on solar power. In some countries, for instance, Norway and China have promoted uses of electric cars and trucks with tax reductions. Other countries in Europe also have plans to replace fuel cars with electric cars in years to come. These will change the look of our road from noisy and smelly fumes into quiet and clean. In conclusion, increasing the price of petrol isn’t a magic cure to curb traffic and pollution, it has a big consequence which is the effect on goods’ prices. Investments in clean energy and electricity is an alternative way along with electric vehicles for the future of transport.
There are lots of measures to address traffic and pollution problems. One of them, which
is considered
to be the ultimate way to solve is making fossil
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fuel
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prices
more expensive.
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But
, there is a drawback which is the effect on the increasing
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prices
of other
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goods
and products, too.
Also
, this isn’t
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seen
to be a success.
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So
, one alternative solution is a huge investment in
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electric
vehicles.

Effects of increased
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fuel
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price
can
be varied
,
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but
the increases of other
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goods
are
easily
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seen
anywhere, from markets, supermarkets and even online shopping websites.
For example
, plastics that we
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use
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everyday
are made
of oil,
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some
made of recycled plastics, and heat is
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used
to
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make
all of these things. If the
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fuel
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price
is more expensive, the upkeep cost, too. Another reason is transportation costs, from ships, trucks and cargo
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
planes
. All of our
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goods
need to
be transferred
from factories to supermarkets. And these transportation costs are always included in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
tags. Since most of our transporters
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
petrol as their main
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fuel
in order to run the whole process. Increasing the petrol
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
will definitely affect these businesses and,
of course
, our money spent on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
.

One way to solve traffic and
especially
pollution without causing any consequences is investing our taxpayers’ money on green energy and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
. These can provide choices to transportation businesses
There should be no space here: "e.g.".
e. g.
Loose punctuation mark.
,
electric-driven trucks and even cargo drones run
solely
on solar power. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries,
for instance
, Norway and China have promoted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
of
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electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
and trucks with tax reductions. Other countries in Europe
also
have plans to replace
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fuel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electric
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cars
in years to
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come
. These will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the look of our road from noisy and smelly fumes into quiet and clean.

In conclusion
, increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
of petrol isn’t a magic cure to curb traffic and pollution, it has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
consequence which is the effect on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
. Investments in clean energy and electricity is an alternative way along with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electric
vehicles for the future of transport.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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