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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective? v.16

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. what other measures do you think might be effective? v. 16
It is believed by some people that raising the price of petrol can solve the ever increasing traffic problem and pollution. In my opinion, I disagree with this belief because it will primarily affect people of low socioeconomic status and there are several other ways to control the pollution problem. The rise in price of fuel to control traffic and pollution is not a good idea as it will primarily affect poor people who already are hand to mouth when it comes to finances. The rich people who already are consuming huge amounts of fuel and contributing to the air pollution will have no effects on their lives, whereas, poor people have to cut down expenditure from grocery or other domestic bills. Their difficult lives will become even tougher with this price hike and will have very little effect on pollution as they contribute to a very small proportion of traffic. Hence price hike is not a good option to solve traffic problems or atmospheric pollution. There are several measures which government can take to control the traffic and pollution. Firstly, the public transport like metro buses and railway tracks should be improved so that people will start travelling in them rather than individual cars which will drastically reduce the consumption of gasoline and eventually less traffic. Secondly, the tax on hybrid cars should be reduced as they consume less oil and hence environmentally friendly. If the prices of these cars are low, people will start purchasing them. Hence, it will be beneficial for both the rulers and individuals in terms of fuel economy. Thirdly, few old worn out cars are responsible for the majority of the carbon dioxide emissions and maximum fuel consumption. Removal of these cars from traffic and replacing them with fuel efficient hybrid cars will successfully control the pollution and it is not possible without governments’ active participation. In conclusion, price hike of petrol is not a good option to control traffic problems rather the improvement of local transport and introduction of fuel efficient hybrid cars are better options.
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that raising the
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price
of petrol can solve the
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ever increasing
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traffic
problem and
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pollution
. In my opinion, I disagree with this belief
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primarily
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people
of low socioeconomic status and there are several other ways to
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control
the
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pollution
problem.

The rise in
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price
of
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fuel
to
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control
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traffic
and
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pollution
is not a
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good
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as it will
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affect poor
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people
who already are hand to mouth when it
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comes
to finances. The rich
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people
who already are consuming huge amounts of
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fuel
and contributing to the air
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pollution
will have no effects on their
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lives
, whereas, poor
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people
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have to
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cut
down expenditure from grocery or other domestic bills. Their difficult
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lives
will become even tougher with this
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price
hike and will have
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very
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little
effect on
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pollution
as they contribute to a
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very
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small
proportion of
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traffic
.
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Hence
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hike is not a
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good
option to solve
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traffic
problems or atmospheric pollution.

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government
can take to
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control
the
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traffic
and
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pollution
.
Firstly
, the public transport like metro buses and railway
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tracks
should be
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improved
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so
that
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people
will
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start
travelling in them
rather
than individual
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cars
which will
drastically
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reduce
the consumption of gasoline and
eventually
less
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traffic
.
Secondly
, the tax on hybrid
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cars
should be
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reduced
as they consume less oil and
hence
environmentally
friendly. If the
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prices
of these
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cars
are low,
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people
will
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start
purchasing them.
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, it will be beneficial for both the rulers and individuals in terms of
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fuel
economy.
Thirdly
, few
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old
worn out
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cars
are responsible for the majority of the carbon dioxide emissions and maximum
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fuel
consumption. Removal of these
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cars
from
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traffic
and replacing them with
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fuel
efficient hybrid
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cars
will
successfully
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control
the
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pollution
and it is not possible without
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governments
’ active participation.

In conclusion
,
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price
hike of petrol is not a
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good
option to
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control
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traffic
problems
rather
the improvement of local transport and introduction of
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fuel
efficient hybrid
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cars
are better options.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. what other measures do you think might be effective? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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