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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree? v.9

Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 9
As a result of the challenges associated with the increase in automobiles on the major roads of cities, some believe that the use of personal cars should be restricted from plying these highways. In my opinion, I strongly agree that this ban should take effect sooner rather than later due to problems such as environmental pollution and traffic congestion. Firstly, cars consumes huge amounts of fuel, consequently emitting carbon monoxide, a poisonous, odourless and tasteless gas, which is harmful to humans. When inhaled, it makes people unwell and subsequently leads to death if taken in large quantities. For example, in a movie I saw recently, a man passed out from excess carbon monoxide in his lungs after sleeping off in his garage with his engine running. Furthermore, blaring horns and sounds from exhaust pipes cause sound pollution, which in turn brings about unrest. Another point to consider is that the presence of many private vehicles on roads cause a traffic jam. In recent times, people find that at the end of a tailback, there are no visible causes such as accidents or on-going construction work. Rather, this is often the result of the high density of automobiles especially during rush hours. A study conducted by a professor and his students at the University of Lisbon showed that heavy traffic jam on highways are more often than not the cause of congestion. In addition, the ripple effect of gridlock caused by the increased amount of cars is that people waste their time on the road which reduces productivity at work thereby affecting the economy negatively. In conclusion, the increase in the use of vehicles comes with its setbacks, thus, many municipalities have suggested its ban in the heart of cities. Despite the merits associated with the use of cars, I strongly believe that banning vehicles from main roads in the metropolis will improve the quality of health and safety of individuals which is of utmost importance.
As a result
of the challenges associated with the increase in automobiles on the major
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roads
of cities,
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some
believe that the
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use
of personal
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cars
should
be restricted
from plying these highways. In my opinion, I
strongly
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agree
that this ban should take effect sooner
rather
than later due to problems such as environmental pollution and traffic congestion.

Firstly
,
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cars
consumes huge amounts of fuel,
consequently
emitting carbon monoxide, a poisonous,
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odourless
and tasteless gas, which is harmful to humans. When inhaled, it
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makes
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people
unwell and
subsequently
leads to death if taken in large quantities.
For example
, in a movie I
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saw
recently, a
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man
passed out from excess carbon monoxide in his lungs after sleeping off in his garage with his engine running.
Furthermore
, blaring horns and sounds from exhaust pipes
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cause
sound pollution, which in turn brings about unrest.

Another point to consider is that the presence of
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many
private vehicles on
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roads
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cause
a traffic jam. In recent times,
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people
find that at the
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end
of a tailback, there are no visible
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causes
such as accidents or
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on-going
construction work.
Rather
, this is
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often
the result of the high density of automobiles
especially
during rush hours. A study conducted by a professor and his students at the University of Lisbon
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showed
that heavy traffic jam on highways are more
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often
than not the
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cause
of congestion.
In addition
, the ripple effect of gridlock caused by the increased amount of
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cars
is that
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people
waste their time on the
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road
which
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reduces
productivity at work thereby affecting the economy
negatively
.

In conclusion
, the increase in the
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use
of vehicles
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comes
with its setbacks,
thus
,
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many
municipalities have suggested its ban in the heart of cities. Despite the merits associated with the
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use
of
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cars
, I
strongly
believe that banning vehicles from main
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roads
in the metropolis will
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improve
the quality of health and safety of individuals which is of utmost importance.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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