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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree? v.2

Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 2
Owing to the increased number of vehicle movement in major cities, it has been suggested that private cars be restricted from plying major roads in the cities. In my opinion, i agree that personal cars be banned from popular road networks in other to decrease traffic congestion and road accident. Firstly, big cities have experienced constant traffic congestion particularly around city centres. To expatiate, the traffic situation around busy areas disrupts movement of people and as a result, slows down business activities. While this problem is due to the rise in number of private vehicles plying the roads, this can be managed by restricting private cars from driving around popular areas. Consequently, commuters are made to use public transport, thereby, decongestion the roads. For instance, the government of Kaduna state have recently banned private vehicles plying the city and this has reduced traffic congestion while increasing revenue through public transport. Another reason why private cars should be banned is because of the high rate of car accidents. Car accidents caused by private vehicles keeps rising and if this continues, the society will incur unnecessary cost maintaining the roads. However, this can be curbed through providing other means of transport like rails and discouraging personal vehicle moving around major areas. For example, in cities where rail system are effective, people prefer to use trains than cars because it has a low accident rate. In conclusion, banning private cars is a successful way to keep the roads safe while ensuring a free flow of business activities. This i believe will reduce government spending on road maintenance while increasing revenue from public transport and trains.
Owing to the increased number of
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vehicle
movement in major
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cities
, it has
been suggested
that
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private
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cars
be restricted
from plying major
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roads
in the
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cities
. In my opinion,
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i
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agree
that personal
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cars
be banned
from popular
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road
networks in other to decrease
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traffic
congestion and
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road
accident.

Firstly
,
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big
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cities
have experienced constant
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traffic
congestion
particularly
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around
city
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centres
. To expatiate, the
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traffic
situation
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around
busy areas disrupts movement of
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people
and
as a result
, slows down business activities. While this problem is due to the rise in number of
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private
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vehicles
plying the
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roads
, this can
be managed
by restricting
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private
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cars
from driving
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around
popular areas.
Consequently
, commuters
are made
to
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use
public transport, thereby,
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decongestion
the
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roads
.
For instance
, the
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government
of
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Kaduna
state have recently banned
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private
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vehicles
plying the city and this has
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reduced
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traffic
congestion while increasing revenue through public transport.

Another reason why
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private
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cars
should
be banned
is
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because
of the high rate of
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car
accidents.
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Car
accidents caused by
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private
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vehicles
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keeps
rising and if this continues, the society will incur unnecessary cost maintaining the
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roads
.
However
, this can
be curbed
through providing other means of transport like rails and discouraging personal
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vehicle
moving
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around
major areas.
For example
, in
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cities
where rail system are effective,
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people
prefer to
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use
trains than
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cars
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because
it has a low accident rate.

In conclusion
, banning
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private
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cars
is a successful way to
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keep
the
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roads
safe while ensuring a free flow of business activities. This
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i
believe will
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reduce
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government
spending on
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road
maintenance while increasing revenue from public transport and trains.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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