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*QUESTION*: Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree? v.1

*QUESTION*: Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 1
All around the world, specifically urban areas are facing a number of issues due to rising in the number of private vehicles. Some towns have decided to stop the use of such personal cars in the city center. However, I completely agree with the proposal of banning cars from the city because it will reduce traffic congestion and also slow down the emission of greenhouse gases. First and foremost, hurdle raised by the increment in car usage is the traffic jams in the city, which can be reduced by putting a ban on it. As this will cut down the number of private cars on the road during the peak hours and solve the town's congestion problem. For example, some developed countries have put a stringent law with a heavy penalty on the use of a private vehicle in the city, thus forces the local people to use public transport more. Thus, a ban on the use of a car by the city dwellers solves the problem of traffic congestion. Furthermore, banning private vehicles also decline the amount of carbon dioxide emission because the gas emission from the vehicles is responsible for the rise in the poisonous gases. To make it more clear, the fuel used in the car emits a higher amount of greenhouse gases and has an adverse effect on the health of humans too. For instance, a recent survey conducted by the researchers revealed that private vehicles emit a larger amount of CO2 gas as compared to renewable resources. Therefore, greenhouse gas emission can be controlled by stopping the use of personal cars in the city. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly that as the number of private cars has been raised on the road, this leads to many problems in the world. Although some cities have banned the utilization of personal cars from the city center, in my opinion, the government should limit the number of vehicles owned by one family for an effective result.
All around the world,
specifically
urban areas are facing a
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number
of issues due to rising in the
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number
of
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private
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vehicles
.
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Some
towns have decided to
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stop
the
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use
of such personal
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cars
in the city center.
However
, I completely
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agree
with the proposal of banning
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cars
from the city
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because
it will
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reduce
traffic congestion and
also
slow down the
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emission
of greenhouse gases.

First
and foremost, hurdle raised by the increment in
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car
usage is the traffic jams in the city, which can be
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reduced
by putting a ban on it. As this will
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cut
down the
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number
of
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private
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cars
on the road during the peak hours and solve the town's congestion problem.
For example
,
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some
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developed countries
have put a stringent law with a heavy penalty on the
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use
of a
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private
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vehicle
in the city,
thus
forces the local
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people
to
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use
public transport more.
Thus
, a ban on the
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use
of a
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car
by the city dwellers solves the problem of traffic congestion.

Furthermore
, banning
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private
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vehicles
also
decline the amount of carbon dioxide
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emission
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because
the gas
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emission
from the
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vehicles
is responsible for the rise in the poisonous gases.

To
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make
it more
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clear
, the fuel
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used
in the
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car
emits a higher amount of greenhouse gases and has an adverse effect on the health of humans too.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the researchers revealed that
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private
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vehicles
emit a larger amount of CO2 gas as compared to renewable resources.
Therefore
, greenhouse gas
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emission
can
be controlled
by stopping the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of personal
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cars
in the city.

In conclusion
, it is
undoubtedly
that as the
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number
of
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private
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cars
has
been raised
on the road, this leads to
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many
problems in the world. Although
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some
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cities
have banned the utilization of personal
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cars
from the city center, in my opinion, the
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government
should limit the
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number
of
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vehicles
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
by one family for an effective result.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay *QUESTION*: Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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