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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the daycity centre. To what extent do you agree? v.4

Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the daycity centre. v. 4
To start with this topic, the more people reside in a city, the more problems will arise. Constructing the building without a parking space in the downtown, is the new trending. To protect the city, and the environment, putting the hard restrictions on usage of cars is a good idea. The following passages will explain more about on this topic. Firstly, we will discuss about the problems of increase in car usage. First and foremost, the traffic is the main hurdle to use the vehicle in the city centre. The road will be the length of 1 km, but it takes 20 to 30 minutes to come out from the city or to enter into the city. The second important problem is, an air pollutant. Due to the number of vehicles are high, the air gets polluted easily. Last but not least, during an emergency situation, handling the enormous amount of people is a tough job. Let's talk about an appropriate or doable solutions for this issue. Already, few cities in the North America restricted the usage of cars in the city centres. It is one of the best solution to make it less vehicles on the road, as well as to increase the profit for the Government. For example, people have to come office by the public transport which leads the government to raise their economy. Else, due to the rates of parking space, people will stop coming to office by their own vehicles. Nevertheless, people stop using car, the air pollution level will come down, the waiting time on the road will be less, etc. To conclude, considering all the benefits of banning the car usage in the city centre is highly welcomed by the citizens. Also, I strongly believe that the above option is one of the best decision which the government has ever taken in the recent days.
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with this topic, the more
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reside in a city, the more problems will arise. Constructing the building without a parking space in the downtown, is the new trending. To protect the city, and the environment, putting the
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hard
restrictions on
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usage
of
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cars
is a
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good
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. The following passages will
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more about on this topic.

Firstly
, we will
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discuss about the
problems of increase in
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car
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usage
.
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and foremost, the traffic is the main hurdle to
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use
the
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vehicle
in the city
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centre
. The road will be the length of 1 km,
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but
it takes 20 to 30 minutes to
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come
out from the city or to enter into the city. The second
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important
problem is, an air pollutant. Due to the number of
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vehicles
are high, the air
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gets
polluted
easily
. Last
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not least, during an emergency situation, handling the enormous amount of
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people
is a tough job.

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Let
's talk about an appropriate or doable solutions for this issue. Already, few
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cities
in the North America restricted the
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usage
of
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cars
in the city
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centres
. It is one of the best solution to
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make
it
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less
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vehicles
on the road,
as well
as to increase the profit for the
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Government
.
For example
,
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people
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have to
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come
office by the public transport which leads the
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government
to raise their economy. Else, due to the rates of parking space,
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people
will
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stop
coming to office by their
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own
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vehicles
.
Nevertheless
,
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people
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stop
using
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car
, the air pollution level will
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come
down, the waiting time on the road will be less, etc.

To conclude
, considering all the benefits of banning the
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car
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usage
in the city
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centre
is
highly
welcomed by the citizens.
Also
, I
strongly
believe that the above option is one of the best decision which the
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government
has ever taken in the recent days.
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IELTS essay Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the daycity centre. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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