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In your opinion, is it better to attend a large state university or a smaller private college? Include details and examples in your explanation. v.1

In your opinion, is it better to attend a large state university or a smaller private college? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1
Climatic change is a growing concern, worldwide. This begs the question: Are nations across the globe responsible for tackling a global threat as this? The unanimous answer lies in the fact that all nations, including the foreign society, should join hands in contributing their bit towards curbing such a major climate problem called 'global warming'. To begin with, global warming is a not restricted to underdeveloped areas and is, in fact, a universal problem. Thereby, all nations should make an equal effort in curbing this issue. Additionally, the developed countries have a greater privilege of supporting more towards social problems, due to facilities such as good economy and improved technology. For instance, international bodies like the United Nation has begun to develop ways that can curtail the risks of climate change as well as addressing the issue through stricter regulations. Hence, joint effort can make a big difference to counter this global problem. Moreover, the international community, having a stronger economy is likely to make greater investments in environment conservation. The U. S. , for example, is encouraging to adopt environmentally friendly methods to control pollution and helping poorer nations along the same lines. Commercial logging, man-made pollution and population are some of the many reasons behind this climate change; hence investing in conservation methods: by planting trees, by adopting more eco-friendly fuels, by recycling waste, can largely be assisted by developed nations overseas. To conclude, a large proportion towards dealing with global warming lies with many international bodies and countries due to their advanced privileges of having a strong economy and much improved facilities. Therefore, such communities should extend a helping hand to protect the planet from global warming.
Climatic
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change
is a growing concern, worldwide. This begs the question: Are
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nations
across the globe responsible for tackling a
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global
threat as this? The unanimous answer lies in the fact that all
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nations
, including the foreign society, should
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join
hands in contributing their bit towards curbing such a major climate problem called 'global warming'.

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begin
with,
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global
warming is a not restricted to underdeveloped areas and is, in fact, a universal problem. Thereby, all
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nations
should
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make
an equal effort in curbing this issue.
Additionally
, the
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developed countries
have a greater privilege of supporting more towards social problems, due to facilities such as
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good
economy and
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improved
technology.
For instance
, international bodies like the United
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Nation
has begun to develop ways that can curtail the
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risks
of climate
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change
as well
as addressing the issue through stricter regulations.
Hence
, joint effort can
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make
a
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difference to counter this
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global
problem.

Moreover
, the international community, having a stronger economy is likely to
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make
greater investments in environment conservation. The U. S.
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to adopt
environmentally
friendly methods to control pollution and helping poorer
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nations
along the same lines. Commercial logging,
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man
-made pollution and population are
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some of the
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reasons behind this climate
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change
;
hence
investing in conservation methods: by planting trees, by adopting more eco-friendly fuels, by recycling waste, can
largely
be assisted
by developed
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nations
overseas.

To conclude
, a large proportion towards dealing with
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global
warming lies with
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many
international bodies and countries due to their advanced privileges of having a strong economy and much
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improved
facilities.
Therefore
, such communities should extend a helping hand to protect the planet from
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global
warming.
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IELTS essay In your opinion, is it better to attend a large state university or a smaller private college? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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