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In which type of house would you prefer to live: in a old historical house or a new modern one? v.1

In which type of house would you prefer to live: in a old historical house or a new modern one? v. 1
As the saying goes learning is eternal, one must not stop from gaining knowledge restricted to classrooms alone. As a matter of fact, education is categorized into many types based on the lesson provided. Therefore, children should not be exposed to limited skills as both practical and academic classes will shape the student's life and will evolve them to be a better human being. Nowadays, working sector is expecting more work oriented knowledge than the theory based subjects. For example, in Japan the pupil is not given any lesson until the age of 7 and are trained in cleanliness and punctuality as moral values cannot be provided through mathematics or science classes. In addition to that, the majority of university graduates in India lack the basic understanding towards the nature of work and the modern technologies used in the organization thereby resulting in unemployment. As the syllabus are not periodically revised, it is more necessary to engage them with the latest news and the market sector so that they are updated with the expectation and manage to fulfil the company's demands. Therefore, it is the responsibility of the school to mend the gap between studies and job by taking the Millenials to frequent trips to organization and other socially responsible events thus actively involving them with the ecological issues and their idea to prevent it. In conclusion, it is in the hands of the educated society to give the most relevant form of education that is actually needed. Instead of focusing on a single line, let us understand the multitude of classes and options available. As a result, both the classroom and practical learning should go hand in hand to deliver a successful student.
As the saying goes learning is eternal, one
must
not
stop
from gaining knowledge restricted to classrooms alone. As a matter of fact, education
is categorized
into
many
types based on the lesson provided.
Therefore
, children should not
be exposed
to limited
skills
as both practical and academic classes will shape the student's life and will evolve them to be a better human being.

Nowadays, working sector is expecting more work oriented knowledge than the theory based subjects.
For example
, in Japan the pupil is not
given
any lesson until the age of 7 and
are trained
in cleanliness and punctuality as moral values cannot
be provided
through mathematics or science classes.
In addition
to that, the majority of university graduates in India lack the basic understanding towards the nature of work and the modern technologies
used
in the organization thereby resulting in unemployment.

As the syllabus are not
periodically
revised, it is more necessary to engage them with the latest news and the market sector
so
that they
are updated
with the expectation and manage to fulfil the
company
's demands.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of the school to mend the gap between studies and job by taking the
Millenials
to frequent trips to organization and other
socially
responsible
events
thus
actively
involving them with the ecological issues and their
idea
to
prevent
it.

In conclusion
, it is in the hands of the educated society to give the most relevant form of education
that is
actually needed.
Instead
of focusing on a single line,
let
us understand the multitude of classes and options available.
As a result
, both the classroom and practical learning should go hand in hand to deliver a successful student.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In which type of house would you prefer to live: in a old historical house or a new modern one? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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