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Some people believe that TV is a useful invention. To what extent you agree with the statement. Give your opinion and explain with the observations and examples from your personal experience. v.1

Some people believe that TV is a useful invention. Give your opinion and explain with the observations and examples from your personal experience. v. 1
The advent of computers and communication media can be clearly seen in the growing world, various fields have developed significantly and this trend has evidently risen with time. Conventional class teaching is one such field which has been gravely affected by the growth in technology and one might think it will replace boardroom teaching completely. To support the statement above, automation and technical classes are convenient and cheaper. This helps cover a larger audience, which makes teaching and learning easier for the teachers and students respectively. To illustrate, Byjus services, one of the E-class startup are investing significantly in online classes and provide such classes at one-tenth the cost a person would spend on the usual boardroom classes. Moreover, such classes are easily available on smartphones in the form of applications which makes studying more fun and saves a lot of time. A student can track performance in the form of dashboards to keep a check on personal goals and areas of improvement without getting any hindrance from the slow or fast learning pace in a lecture program. On the contrary, classroom teaching has its own benefits. It provides a more personal experience of teaching which enables the students to develop communication skills and provides them a platform to know the skills of competing audience as well. It creates a routine, which helps every student develop skills around the subject being taught in the lecture. For instance, ninety percent of the students aspiring to give competitive exams like CAT, SAT etc. , agree that classroom teaching benefits them more compared to an application based teaching. In conclusion, anyone cannot argue that technology has shown remarkable growth in the education industry, making learning faster and consumer friendly, posing a serious threat to the old ways of classroom teaching.
The advent of computers and communication media can be
clearly
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seen
in the growing world, various fields have developed
significantly
and this trend has
evidently
risen with time. Conventional
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class
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teaching
is one such field which has been
gravely
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affected
by the growth in technology and one might
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think
it will replace boardroom
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teaching
completely.

To support the statement above, automation and technical
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classes
are convenient and cheaper. This
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helps
cover a larger audience, which
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makes
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teaching
and learning easier for the teachers and
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students
respectively
. To illustrate,
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Byjus
services, one of the E-
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class
startup are investing
significantly
in online
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classes
and provide such
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classes
at one-tenth the cost a person would spend on the usual boardroom
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classes
.
Moreover
, such
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classes
are
easily
available on smartphones in the form of applications which
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makes
studying more fun and saves
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a lot of
time. A
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student
can
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track
performance in the form of dashboards to
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keep
a
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check
on personal goals and areas of improvement without getting any hindrance from the slow or
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fast
learning pace in a lecture program.

On the contrary
, classroom
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teaching
has its
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own
benefits. It provides a more personal experience of
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teaching
which enables the
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students
to develop communication
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skills
and provides them a platform to know the
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skills
of competing audience
as well
. It creates a routine, which
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helps
every
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student
develop
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skills
around the subject
being taught
in the lecture.
For instance
, ninety percent of the
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students
aspiring to give competitive exams like CAT, SAT etc.
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,
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agree
that classroom
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teaching
benefits them more compared to an application based teaching.

In conclusion
, anyone cannot argue that technology has shown remarkable growth in the education industry, making learning faster and consumer friendly, posing a serious threat to the
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old
ways of classroom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
.
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7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that TV is a useful invention. Give your opinion and explain with the observations and examples from your personal experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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