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In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v.1

In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1
In today's world, we cannot deny that technology has a private role in our lives. People use technology to help them to use their task faster than the past. But a controversial question that arises among people is whether we should work quickly and take risks, even though we do our work by inaccuracy. Some people believe that speed is very fundamental in today's world, so we should do our work as soon as possible. The other people think that if you accept one task you should do it correctly and it is more important than speed. I agree with the second group because of two crucial reasons. In what follows, I will pinpoint my causes. The first noteworthy reason is that some of the mistakes are irreparable and the companies or people should spend a lot of money or hour to fix the problem. Hence, I think each person should do his or her job correct, even though he or she spent plenty of day on that. For instance, my friend Zahra worked for a famous company in Tehran. She always is in a hurry and did her task quickly without any precise. One day he made a bad mistake in her calculation and the company loses a lot of its investment because of her mistake. Therefore, my friend fired and the company spent a lot of money to compensate for the fault of her. The second convincing reason is that in the end, we can say that the people who work slower and more accurate than other people can save more time. A group of scientists at Harvard University designs an experiment about this issue. They investigate two groups of people. The first group consists of people who do more risk in comparison to the other groups. At the end of the experiment, people, who did the risk, did much more mistakes and they force to compensate for their mistake. Hence, the groups who work slower finished their general works sooner than the first group. In short, all the reasons, as mentioned above, lead us to the conclusion that we should do our work slowly and correctly. If we did our works correct, we will get a better result in the end.
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use
technology to
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help
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their task faster than the past.
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a controversial question that arises among
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people
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is
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work
quickly
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we do our
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work
by inaccuracy.
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people
believe that speed is
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very
fundamental in
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today
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we should do our
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as
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soon
as possible. The other
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people
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think
that if you accept one task you should do it
correctly
and it is more
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important
than speed. I
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with the second
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of two crucial
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. In what follows, I will pinpoint my causes.

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first
noteworthy
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is that
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some of the
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mistakes
are irreparable and the
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companies
or
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people
should spend
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a lot of
money or hour to
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fix
the problem.
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think
each person should do
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his or her
job correct,
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he or she spent
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plenty
of day on that.
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Zahra
worked for a
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company
in Tehran. She
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always is
in a hurry and did her task
quickly
without any precise. One day he made a
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bad
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mistake
in her calculation and the
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company
loses
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a lot of
its investment
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because
of her
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mistake
.
Therefore
, my friend fired and the
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spent
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a lot of
money to compensate for the fault of her.

The second convincing
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reason
is that in the
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, we can say that the
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people
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who
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work
slower and more accurate than other
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people
can save more time. A
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group
of scientists at Harvard University designs an experiment about this issue. They investigate two
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of
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people
. The
first
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consists of
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people
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do more
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risk
in comparison
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groups
. At the
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of the experiment,
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people
,
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who
did the
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, did much more
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mistakes and
they force
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to compensate
for their
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, the
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groups
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who
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slower finished their general works sooner than the
first
group.

In short, all the
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reasons
, as mentioned above, lead us to the conclusion that we should do our
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work
slowly
and
correctly
. If we did our works correct, we will
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get
a better result in the
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end
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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