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In today's world, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than working slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v.1

In today's world, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than working slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1
Some public is commenting that, the level of education is rapidly changing, over the period of time. The present education, is focusing much on, the theoretical aspects, rather than, the practicable aspects. In my opinion, I agree to the above statement that, most of the educational institutions, are focusing on the way that, the student should be motivated, with only books, to achieve fame, for the organization. However, The government, is taking necessary measures, to ensure, the growth of knowledge in the toddler is efficient, with performing skills. On the one hand, Several corporate organizations develop with a common goal, that is, to commercialize, and obtain a huge amount of money, from the innocent community. For example, Various private academicians, plan to advertise their institute for public, along with, collaborations with international partnerships, by displaying, the massive success of the results, of the students, to receive admissions, and gain profits. Further, it is making the situation worse, for young kids, and adolescents. While, on the other hand, schools, and universities, that are governed under ruling monarch, ensure to provide students, with suitable constructive approaches, which they can likewise, apply to other agencies, at which they are willing to work. This is achieved by, continuous activities, such as, the science fair competition, the elocution, the field trip and many more, making the young one, into a successful individual. Secondly, Legal bodies have begun to target these other managements, who is exploiting the future of the juvenile by making false promises to their families. Further, They have also started to implement various activities, in non-government system, which will make sure that, the kid will, able to develop, execution along with theory facts and approach. In addition to that, these all regulations, are evaluated by, special officers, which are recruited by the ruler. Hence, making the future, a healthy and happy living society. Finally, In conclusion, I conclude that, In spite of corruption, and damaging of current educational practices, these can be controlled if the governments take necessary actions. If, these actions are not followed by schools and universities, in such case, it is sure that, the future of the world is nullified and innovations will not be possible in the near decades and centuries.
Some
public is commenting that, the level of education is
rapidly
changing, over the period of time. The present education, is focusing much on, the theoretical aspects,
rather
than, the practicable aspects. In my opinion, I
agree
to the above statement that, most of the educational institutions, are focusing on the way that, the student should
be motivated
, with
only
books, to achieve fame, for the organization.
However
, The
government
, is taking necessary measures, to ensure, the growth of knowledge in the toddler is efficient, with performing
skills
.

On the one hand, Several corporate organizations develop with a common goal,
that is
, to commercialize, and obtain a huge amount of money, from the innocent community.
For example
, Various private academicians, plan to advertise their institute for public, along with, collaborations with international partnerships, by displaying, the massive success of the results, of the students, to receive admissions, and gain profits.
Further
, it is making the situation worse, for young kids, and adolescents. While,
on the other hand
, schools, and universities, that
are governed
under ruling monarch, ensure to provide students, with suitable constructive approaches, which they can
likewise
, apply to other agencies, at which they are willing to work. This
is achieved
by, continuous activities, such as, the science
fair
competition, the elocution, the field trip and
many
more, making the young one, into a successful individual.

Secondly
, Legal bodies have begun to target these other managements, who is exploiting the future of the juvenile by making false promises to their families.
Further
, They have
also
started
to implement various activities, in non-
government
system, which will
make
sure that, the kid will, able to develop, execution along with theory facts and approach.
In addition
to that, these all regulations,
are evaluated
by, special officers, which
are recruited
by the ruler.
Hence
, making the future, a healthy and happy living society.

Finally
,
In conclusion
, I conclude that,
In spite of
corruption, and damaging of
current
educational practices, these can
be controlled
if the
governments
take necessary actions. If, these actions are not followed by schools and universities, in such case,
it is sure
that, the future of the world
is nullified
and innovations will not be possible in the near decades and centuries.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In today's world, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than working slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
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