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In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. ] Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? v.2

In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. ] Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? v. 2
With changing times and attitudes, it has become very difficult for people to be successful in their professional lives without having the right skill sets. In my opinion, of all skills necessary, good qualifications related to one’s area of work are the most important. Good qualifications will help people to do well in their jobs. Most importantly, education helps people to understand their work requirements and responsibilities, due to having learnt about their field in university. As a result of knowing their duties, they will deliver enhanced performance at work, such as by proactively taking on challenging assignments, which will cause them to be noticed by their supervisors and managers. Eventually, this will lead to a positive impression, leading to better performance appraisals and there will be a high probability of getting promotions, which would be immensely beneficial for their career. Thus, education plays a crucial role for professional success. Good qualifications enable access to lucrative employment opportunities. This is because possessing they enable people to apply to many jobs, as many employers request certain qualifications from a prospective employee; a person without these would not even be able to apply for the job. Consequently, qualified people appear for several interviews and will be more likely to get hired, as they are well-equipped with the knowledge related to their profession. Furthermore, they would also have a good amount of negotiating power, which means they could ask for higher salaries and better benefits, thereby landing a well-paid and satisfying job. Hence, good qualifications are vital for a rewarding career. In conclusion, it is evident that good qualifications are crucial for people to be successful in their professional lives because these help in performing well in their jobs and gaining access to better job opportunities. If people wish to have successful careers, they should focus on acquiring the requisite qualifications.
With changing times and attitudes, it has become
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difficult for
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to be successful in their professional
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without having the right
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skill
sets. In my opinion, of all
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skills
necessary,
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good
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qualifications
related to one’s area of work are the most
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important
.

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Good
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qualifications
will
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help
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people
to do well in their
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jobs
. Most
importantly
, education
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helps
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people
to understand their work requirements and responsibilities, due to having
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learnt
about their field in university.
As a result
of knowing their duties, they will deliver enhanced performance at work, such as by
proactively
taking on challenging assignments, which will cause them to
be noticed
by their supervisors and managers.
Eventually
, this will lead to a
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positive
impression, leading to better performance appraisals and there will be a high probability of getting promotions, which would be
immensely
beneficial for their career.
Thus
, education plays a crucial role for professional success.

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Good
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qualifications
enable access to lucrative employment opportunities. This is
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possessing they enable
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people
to apply to
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jobs
, as
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employers request certain
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qualifications
from a prospective employee; a person without these would not even be able to apply for the
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job
.
Consequently
, qualified
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people
appear for several interviews and will be more likely to
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get
hired, as they are well-equipped with the knowledge related to their profession.
Furthermore
, they would
also
have a
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good
amount of negotiating power, which means they could
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ask for
higher salaries and better benefits, thereby landing a well-paid and satisfying
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job
.
Hence
,
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good
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qualifications
are vital for a rewarding career.

In conclusion
, it is evident that
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good
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qualifications
are crucial for
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people
to be successful in their professional
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lives
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because
these
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help
in performing well in their
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jobs
and gaining access to better
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job
opportunities. If
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people
wish to have successful careers, they should focus on acquiring the requisite
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qualifications
.
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IELTS essay In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. ] Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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