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In today’s job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

In today’s job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. v. 2
Today parents pay a lot of attention to their  children's success and there are a variety of causes doing that. But I think, it brings more negative things than positive in young's life. Initially, we live in the world of high demands. People always seek for a good life qualities which is obviously contains a stable job with big salaries that become a synonym for the word success. What is pretty normal for people to be more thorough in this matter and that kind of situation provokes a rivalry between people in this area. That is why in family atmosphere parents pay attention for children's future achievement from very small ages. They often put to much pressure to it. For instance, thing like education, sport or other, which I think is not very beneficial. Generally speaking, that the pressure which is laying on children, may cause a lot of stress. Parents put high expectations on a child's life. That is why they have too much  effort at work and afraid of being failed at something. This brings great negative consequences on the psyche of the child and complicates its further development or may even affect his behaviour. In this situation, I think it will be more crucial if parents treat it more freely and give for children more space, more room for self-development and do not overpress. In conclusion, as the analysed reasons above, I strongly believe that parents  overpressure toward children succsless lead to many negative effects that can affect kid's health.
Today
parents
pay
a lot of
attention to their
 
children's success and there are a variety of causes doing that.
But
I
think
, it brings more
negative
things than
positive
in young's life.

Initially
, we
live
in the world of high demands.
People
always seek for a
good
life qualities which is
obviously
contains a stable job with
big
salaries that become a synonym for the word success. What is pretty normal for
people
to be more thorough in this matter and that kind of situation provokes a rivalry between
people
in this area.
That is
why in family atmosphere
parents
pay attention for children's future achievement from
very
small
ages. They
often
put
to
much pressure to it.
For instance
, thing like education, sport or other, which I
think
is not
very
beneficial.

Generally
speaking, that the pressure which is laying on children, may cause
a lot of
stress
.
Parents
put high expectations on a child's life.
That is
why they have too much
 
effort at work and afraid of
being failed
at something. This brings great
negative
consequences on the psyche of the child and complicates its
further
development or may even affect his
behaviour
. In this situation, I
think
it will be more crucial if
parents
treat it more
freely
and give for children more space, more room for self-development and do not
overpress
.

In conclusion
, as the
analysed
reasons above, I
strongly
believe that parents
 
overpressure
toward children
succsless
lead to
many
negative
effects that can affect kid's health.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In today’s job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
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