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In times of economic crisis, in which field do you think the government can cut financial support? 1. Art2. Scientific research3. Parks and public gardens v.2

In times of economic crisis, in which field do you think the government can cut financial support? 1. Art2. Scientific research3. Parks and public gardens v. 2
Economic crisis has been occurring periodically in the Western world for a hundred of years, since the Great Depression in the last century. When crisis is coming, government always have to cut financial support for some fields, due to the shrunken tax income. If I were governor, I’d like to withdraw fund from art or parks and public gardens, but never form scientific research. Cutting scientific investment is definitely the last option to be considered. On the contrary, every wise man knows for certain that more fund should be distributed to scientific research during economic crisis. Scientific breakthrough and technological revolution is entitled the most powerful engine for economic prosperity. History is replete with evidence to demonstrate this point. If it were not for the invention of steam engine, we would still use wagons as main method of transportation today. As a result, long-distance trade would be every slow and inefficient, which apparently has a negative effect on economy. If it were not for the large-scale application of electricity, we would still use candles for illumination. Without the assistance of light bulb, available working time for human would be limited within the daytime. How can you expect us to go through economic crisis, but do not provide us enough time to work? According to history, scientific research is definitely the most promising field to invest in times of economic crisis. Any significant breakthrough or revolutionary invention is adequate to lead us out of the crisis. Compared with scientific research, art or parks and public gardens are relatively less critical to us, especially under the pressure of economic crisis. They can’t directly help us with the crisis, although they play a positive role in our lives. If the tight budget during crisis forces government to cut financial support in some fields, they are ideal options. The fund saved from them can be applied to realms, which is helpful for surviving a economic crisis, like education, science, infrastructure or other economic stimulation policies. Once the crisis passes, government can inject sufficient capital into art field or parks and public gardens again as an offset to the financial cut during crisis. In summary, given the close relationship between scientific advancement and economic development, reducing scientific fund is always my last option. As for art or parks and public gardens, cutting their financial support are acceptable, if it is necessary.
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crisis
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in the Western world for a hundred of years, since the Great Depression in the last century. When
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crisis
is coming,
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government
always
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have to
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cut
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financial
support for
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some
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fields
, due to the shrunken tax income. If I were governor, I’d like to withdraw
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fund
from
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art
or
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parks
and
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public
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gardens
,
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but
never form
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scientific
research.

Cutting
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scientific
investment is definitely the last option to
be considered
.
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, every wise
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man
knows for certain that more
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fund
should
be distributed
to
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scientific
research during
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economic
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crisis
.
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Scientific
breakthrough and technological revolution
is entitled
the most powerful engine for
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economic
prosperity. History is replete with evidence to demonstrate this point. If it were not for the invention of steam engine, we would
still
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use
wagons as main method of transportation
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today
.
As a result
, long-distance trade would be every slow and inefficient, which
apparently
has a
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negative
effect on economy. If it were not for the large-scale application of electricity, we would
still
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use
candles for illumination. Without the assistance of light bulb, available working time for human would
be limited
within the daytime. How can you
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expect
us to go through
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economic
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crisis
,
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but
do not provide us
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enough
time to work? According to history,
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scientific
research is definitely the most promising
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field
to invest in times of
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economic
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crisis
. Any significant breakthrough or revolutionary invention is adequate to lead us out of the crisis.

Compared with
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scientific
research,
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art
or
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parks
and
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public
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gardens
are
relatively
less critical to us,
especially
under the pressure of
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economic
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crisis
. They can’t
directly
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help
us with the
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crisis
, although they play a
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positive
role in our
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lives
. If the tight budget during
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crisis
forces
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government
to
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cut
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financial
support in
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some
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fields
, they are ideal options. The
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fund
saved from them can
be applied
to realms, which is helpful for surviving
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economic
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crisis
, like education, science, infrastructure or other
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economic
stimulation policies. Once the
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crisis
passes,
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government
can inject sufficient capital into
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art
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field
or
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parks
and
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public
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gardens
again as an offset to the
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financial
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cut
during crisis.

In summary,
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given
the close relationship between
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scientific
advancement and
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economic
development, reducing
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scientific
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fund
is always my last option. As for
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art
or
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parks
and
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public
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gardens
, cutting their
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financial
support are acceptable, if it is necessary.
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IELTS essay In times of economic crisis, in which field do you think the government can cut financial support? 1. Art2. Scientific research3. Parks and public gardens v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
396 words
6.0
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