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In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v.2

In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v. 2
All around the world, tourism is losing its glitter, due to the lack of responsibility by the government, tourists and local people. Some people consider taking responsibility in tourism by each individual is essential for the better environment, preserving cultures and improving the economy, whereas others think, this cannot be achieved in reality. In my opinion, tourism responsibility is required for better future of the world and this can be achieved with proper implementation. People travel to different places but never show any attention or responsibility towards its improvement. To make this world a better place to live in, one should take it as one’s responsibility. First of all, the government should take a step, releasing more funds towards tourism and for providing much security. For instance, we find filthy guest houses, restrooms and no cleaning of surrounding places. People travel to enjoy the beauty of nature, but if they find this kind of dirty places, their enjoyment which lead to a bad memory. Even, local people and tourists who travel should obey the guidelines and policy of tourism for a better world. However, there are some people who think when it comes to implementation of this; it is like a day dream which cannot come into reality. It is difficult for poor and developing countries to utilise more funds towards tourism. On the other hand, it is difficult to provide security and neatness at tourist spots unless every tourist shows attention as his responsibility. For instance, if there are sign boards which shows ‘please use right direction, danger at left direction’, they use only left and if there are any dustbins with ‘please use me’, they do not use them at all. Thus it is very difficult to make it into reality. In conclusion, better tourism can be achieved only if every individual takes the responsibility towards tourism. One should think, how much one is contributing, instead of just arguing and blaming the government. But the government should take the first step in achieving this. With this, not only it increases blissfulness of tourists but also increases economy of the country.
All around the world,
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tourism
is losing its glitter, due to the lack of
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responsibility
by the
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government
,
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tourists
and local
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people
.
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people
consider taking
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responsibility
in
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tourism
by each individual is essential for the
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better
environment, preserving cultures and improving the economy, whereas others
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think
, this cannot
be achieved
in reality. In my opinion,
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tourism
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responsibility
is required
for
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better
future of the world and this can
be achieved
with proper implementation.

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travel to
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different
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places
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but
never
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show
any attention or
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responsibility
towards its improvement. To
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make
this world a
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better
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place
to
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live
in, one should take it as one’s
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responsibility
.
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First of all
, the
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government
should take a step, releasing more funds towards
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tourism
and for providing much security.
For instance
, we find filthy guest
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houses
, restrooms and no cleaning of surrounding
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places
.
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People
travel to enjoy the beauty of nature,
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but
if they find this kind of dirty
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places
, their enjoyment which lead to a
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bad
memory. Even, local
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people
and
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tourists
who travel should obey the guidelines and policy of
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tourism
for a
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better
world.

However
, there are
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some
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people
who
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think
when it
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comes
to implementation of this; it is like a day dream which cannot
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come
into reality. It is difficult for poor and
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developing countries
to
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utilise
more funds towards
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tourism
.
On the other hand
, it is difficult to provide security and neatness at
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tourist
spots unless every
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tourist
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shows
attention as his
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responsibility
.
For instance
, if there are
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sign
boards which
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shows
‘
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please
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use
right direction,
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danger
at
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left
direction’, they
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use
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only
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left
and if there are any dustbins with ‘
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please
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use
me’, they do not
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use
them at all.
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Thus
it is
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very
difficult to
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make
it into reality.

In conclusion
,
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better
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tourism
can
be achieved
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only
if every individual takes the
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responsibility
towards
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tourism
. One should
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think
, how much one is contributing,
instead
of
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just
arguing and blaming the
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government
.
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But
the
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government
should take the
first
step in achieving this. With this, not
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only
it increases blissfulness of
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tourists
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but
also
increases economy of the country.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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