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In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v.1

In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v. 1
In the twenty-first century, we are constantly confronted with the issue of 'responsible tourism' which is a current trend in front of the tourism that focuses mainly on the traditions and environment on newspaper. Some people, nevertheless, are if the opinion that it is nearly impossible to be implemented in this modern world. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before reaching a reasonable conclusion. Admittedly, 'responsible tourism' is difficult to be promoted in every country around the globe. It is, possibly, due to the reason that tourists come from everywhere of the world and some of them may not be well-educated which cause them to behave badly when they visit a new country. For example, I have seen some foreign tourists who visited my country do not take care of the Mother Nature and they plucked flowers along the way to a museum. By doing so, their naive acts can destroy the beautiful scenery of a specific tourist spot. However, I am not convinced by others that the 'responsible tourism' can never possible to be implemented owing to several reasons. To begin, tour guides have the obligations to advise or give information to the tourists about the local culture. It is the key for the tourists, especially those from overseas to respect the cultures and traditions of the locals. It is also given them an opportunity to know about the cultures of other countries so as to broaden their views. It is crucial for individual to learn the cultures of other races around the world in order to avoid culture shock and be more open-minded. In addition, government, undoubtedly, plays an indispensable role in ensuring the 'responsible tourism' runs smoothly. They can, for instance, to organise more campaigns with the aim to promote the local culture and environment to both the local and foreign tourists. More noticeable should be placed in every corner of the tourist attractions to encourage the tourists to keep the place clean as it is the most effective and direct way to take care of the environment. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that 'responsible tourism' is impossible to implement as they are a handful of useful preventive measures that the individuals and government can take to promote this kind of tourism without causing any harm to the local cultures and environment.
In the twenty-
first
century, we are
constantly
confronted with the issue of
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'responsible
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tourism'
which is a
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current
trend in front of the tourism that focuses
mainly
on the traditions and environment on newspaper.
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Some
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people
,
nevertheless
, are if the opinion that it is
nearly
impossible to
be implemented
in this modern world. This essay will examine both sides of the argument
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before
reaching a reasonable conclusion.

Admittedly
,
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'responsible
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tourism'
is difficult to
be promoted
in every
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country
around the globe. It is,
possibly
, due to the reason that
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tourists
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come
from everywhere of the world and
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some
of them may not be well-educated which cause them to behave
badly
when they visit a new
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country
.
For example
, I have
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seen
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some
foreign
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tourists
who visited my
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country
do not take care of the Mother
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Nature and
they plucked flowers along the way to a museum. By doing
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so
, their naive acts can
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destroy
the
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beautiful
scenery of a specific
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tourist
spot.

However
, I am not convinced by others that the
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'responsible
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tourism'
can never possible to
be implemented
owing to several reasons. To
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begin
, tour guides have the obligations to advise or give information to the
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tourists
about the
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local
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culture
. It is the key for the
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tourists
,
especially
those from overseas to respect the
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cultures
and traditions of the
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locals
. It is
also
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given
them an opportunity to know about the
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cultures
of other
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countries
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so as to
broaden their views.
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It
is crucial for individual to learn the
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cultures
of other races around the world in order to avoid
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culture
shock and be more open-minded.
In addition
,
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government
,
undoubtedly
, plays an indispensable role in ensuring the
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'responsible
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tourism'
runs
smoothly
. They can,
for instance
, to
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organise
more campaigns with the aim to promote the
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local
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culture
and environment to both the
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local
and foreign
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tourists
. More noticeable should
be placed
in every corner of the
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tourist
attractions to encourage the
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tourists
to
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keep
the place clean as it is the most effective and direct way to take care of the environment.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
disagree with the
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idea
that
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'responsible
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tourism'
is impossible to implement as they are a handful of useful preventive measures that the individuals and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can take to promote this kind of tourism without causing any harm to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultures
and environment.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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