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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.7

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 7
Earlier students did their higher education in their country, but now due to globalisation students have a lot of opportunities to go to foreign countries for higher education. I would like to discuss the pros and cons of this development in this essay. One advantage of pursuing higher studies abroad is that students get to interact with different kinds of people and learn about new cultures and languages. This helps to enhance their perspectives. For example, recent studies have shown that people who have studied and worked in different counties are more adaptive and knowledgeable. They can have better career opportunities because they bring new ideas and technology. On the other hand, studying abroad has its own cons. Students who tend to go to other countries for higher education try to make the new country their home. They finish their studies, start with their career and settle down there. For example, many Indian students go to foreign countries like the United States of America to pursue their higher education. Instead of returning to their country after completing their studies, they get enamoured of the sophisticated lifestyle of the rich country and choose to live there. In this way, many developing and underdeveloped countries lose valuable human resources. In conclusion, there are both benefits and drawbacks to studying abroad. The main advantage is that the students get to learn a lot of new things while studying abroad. The main disadvantage is that they may choose not to return to their country and thus fail to contribute to its development.
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. I would like to discuss the pros and cons of this development in this essay.

One advantage of pursuing higher
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studies
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is that
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get
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different
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people
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cultures and languages. This
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their home. They finish their
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countries
like the United States of America to pursue their higher
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education
.
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of returning to their
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country
after completing their
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, they
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of the sophisticated lifestyle of the rich
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country
and choose to
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live
there. In this way,
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developing and underdeveloped
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countries
lose valuable human resources.

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abroad
. The main advantage is that the
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students
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get
to learn
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a lot of
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new
things while studying
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abroad
. The main disadvantage is that they may choose not to return to their
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country
and
thus
fail to contribute to its development.
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IELTS essay In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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