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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.8

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 8
Overseas learning is recognized by many multinational companies. On account of this, many international universities have opened their doors for foreign students, compared to completing studies in their home country earlier. Is this change a boon or a loss? This essay will attempt to objectively examine all significant components in detail. Objectivity being of the essence, the following words will weigh one side of the issue against the other. In my opinion, education abroad is a golden chance for students to enhance their career. On the other hand, most people have a different outlook on this development. The following two paragraphs will delve effectively into both aspects. First, getting a foreign education will increase job opportunities for these pupils globally. Second, many universities abroad have advanced techniques of training students. Once these techniques are mastered, the students can return and serve their country. To substantiate the above, my neighbour completed his medical education from London university and returned to India to serve in a government hospital. However, few people believe that schooling abroad might spoil their child with western culture and they could also get settled abroad. Next, learning in foreign college requires a huge amount of investment and everyone cannot afford an education loan. To corroborate what has just been stated, my friend went to a distant land for studying, but after completing his degree, he didn’t land up with a well paid job and still struggling to pay off his loan. In light of the above, positives like overseas job opportunities are evident. Contrarily, threats to parents, that their children would move from homeland permanently command equal consideration. Bringing this essay to a close, there are two sides to any situation.
Overseas learning
is recognized
by
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many
multinational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
. On account of this,
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many
international universities have opened their doors for foreign
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students
, compared to completing studies in their home country earlier. Is this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
a boon or a loss? This essay will attempt to
objectively
examine all significant components in detail.

Objectivity being of the essence, the following words will weigh one side of the issue against the other. In my opinion,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
is a golden chance for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to enhance their career.
On the other hand
, most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
outlook on this development. The following two paragraphs will delve
effectively
into both aspects.

First
, getting a foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
will increase job opportunities for these pupils globally. Second,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
universities
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
have advanced techniques of training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. Once these techniques
are mastered
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can return and serve their country. To substantiate the above, my
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neighbour
completed his medical
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education
from London university and returned to India to serve in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
hospital.

However
, few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that schooling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
might spoil their child with western
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
culture and
they could
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
settled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
.
Next
, learning in foreign college requires a huge amount of investment and everyone cannot afford an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
loan. To corroborate what has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
been stated
, my friend went to a distant land for studying,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after completing his degree, he didn’t land up with a well paid job and
still
struggling to pay off his loan.

In light of the above, positives like overseas job opportunities are evident.
Contrarily
, threats to parents, that their children would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
from homeland
permanently
command equal consideration. Bringing this essay to a close, there are two sides to any situation.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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