In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? v.16
In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.  v. 16
The twenty-first century has seen a rapid increase in the markets. To go to shopping is a simple deal for modern people, however, even a century ago it was a hard procedure. From my point of view, to be able to go to stores and feel ease is really beneficial, because it might be one of the ways to release stress and, also, it is, perhaps, an equivalent to physical trainings for some people.
First reason, why shopping as a hobby is a positive trend, is relaxation method. To put it another way, the majority of the population all over the world work twelve hours a day with only two or one day weekend and that is why, especially for mothers, shopping is kinds of relaxation therapies. For instance, modern mothers go to supermarkets every day and spend there at least 30 minutes. They find it a useful way to forget about their jobs and give eyes to relax from computer and phone. However, some people prefer release stress differently.
Secondly, more and more people all over the globe have a sedentary lifestyle. Fro low active people shopping is a great opportunity to restart a blood supply and do a little workout. For example, one hour of shopping is might be equal to one hour of walking, which may burn approximately 200 calories. Nevertheless, even though, some super lazy people can order everything what they need online.
In conclusion, more people find shopping as a pleasant outing and it is an advantage for their life, because it is might be stress treatment or workout remover. Therefore, it is recommended to go to shopping more often if you are tired of job or have a low active lifestyle. 
The twenty- 
first
 century has  
seen
 a rapid increase in the markets. To go to  
shopping
 is a simple deal for modern  
people
,  
however
, even a century ago it was a  
hard
 procedure. From my point of view, to be able to go to stores and feel  
ease
 is  
really
 beneficial,  
because
 it might be one of the ways to release  
stress
 and,  
also
, it is, perhaps, an equivalent to physical trainings for  
some
  people
. 
First
 reason, why  
shopping
 as a hobby is a  
positive
 trend, is relaxation method. To put it another way, the majority of the population all over the world work twelve hours a day with  
only
 two or one day weekend and  
that is
 why,  
especially
 for mothers,  
shopping
 is kinds of relaxation therapies.  
For instance
, modern mothers go to supermarkets every day and spend there at least 30 minutes. They find it a useful way to forget about their jobs and give eyes to relax from computer and phone.  
However
,  
some
  people
 prefer release  
stress
  differently
. 
Secondly
, more and more  
people
 all over the globe have a sedentary lifestyle.  
Fro
 low active  
people
  shopping
 is a great opportunity to restart a blood supply and do a  
little
 workout.  
For example
, one hour of  
shopping
 is might be equal to one hour of walking, which may burn approximately 200 calories.  
Nevertheless
,  
even though
,  
some
  super
 lazy  
people
 can order everything what they need online. 
In conclusion
, more  
people
 find  
shopping
 as a pleasant outing and it is an advantage for their life,  
because
 it is might be  
stress
 treatment or workout remover.  
Therefore
, it  
is recommended
 to go to  
shopping
 more  
often
 if you  
are tired
 of job or have a low active lifestyle. 
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