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Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment? v.2

Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment? v. 2
Over the past few years, in spite of warnings from scientists about the need for protecting the environment and emphasising to people to control their energy use every day, the majority of people do not take into account. In this essay, I intend to explore this problem and suggest some possible solutions to it. Chief among the causes of this problem is that the members of the public are not aware of the importance of the surroundings. This is due to the government frequently focuses on national economic development rather than environmental protection. For example, a greenhouse gas which is produced by some firm's factories, contributing to air pollution, is rarely reported by the media. Another contributing factor is that residents are unlikely to do recycling on a fairly regular basis as the government does not strongly implement the series of measures on it. This, hence, may result in more damages in our surroundings. In order to resolve the environmental issue, I believe we must address its root causes. Perhaps the most effective methods of doing this would be for the government to introduce much stricter regulation of firms. For instance, curb the amount of using fossil fuels annually or encourage them to use sustainable green sources of energy. One further measure would be to educate people about conserving energy and the importance of recycling. If most people can follow the rules, it would also give our next generation a good place to live. In conclusion, it is unlikely to be resolved in the short term. However, it is my personal belief that the measures outlined above would constitute a good step.
Over the past few years,
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in spite of
warnings from scientists about the need for protecting the environment and
Possible spelling mistake. 'emphasising' is British English.
emphasising
to
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people
to control their energy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
every day, the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not take into account. In this essay, I intend to explore this problem and suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
possible solutions to it.

Chief among the causes of this problem is that the members of the public are not aware of the importance of the surroundings. This is due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
frequently
focuses on national economic development
rather
than environmental protection.
For example
, a greenhouse gas which
is produced
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
firm's factories, contributing to air pollution, is rarely reported by the media. Another contributing factor is that residents are unlikely to
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go recycling".
do recycling
on a
fairly
regular basis as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
does not
strongly
implement the series of measures on it. This,
hence
, may result in more damages in our surroundings.

In order to resolve the environmental issue, I believe we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
address its root causes. Perhaps the most effective methods of doing this would be for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to introduce much stricter regulation of firms.
For instance
, curb the amount of using fossil fuels
annually
or encourage them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
sustainable green sources of energy. One
further
measure would be to educate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
about conserving energy and the importance of recycling. If most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
, it would
also
give our
next
generation a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.

In conclusion
, it is unlikely to
be resolved
in the short term.
However
, it is my personal belief that the measures outlined above would constitute a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
step.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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