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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. v. 5
The curriculum has changed in many years later. The large numbers of scholars attend to a lectures is now leaded to a arguments whether it is necessary or not because of the developments on electrical devices. I will present my opinion in this essay. One the one hand, technology help students can learn at anywhere and anytime. With the people they who faces difficulty to arrange and finding the place to learns so computers and the internet will help them a lot. When a guy has their own free time, they can easily surf the internet and seeking the information they want. If you engaged to a lecture not on times you may lose some information, hard to catch up and maybe the lectures is to crowd. On the other hand, take part in a lectures can give you more essential knowledge. Even it is a crowd class and you have to concentrate hardly but it will make you understand clearly and received information effectively. Tutors have experienced on the process of learning, so they will teach us the pivot grasp, and we not ruin our time for spare. Furthermore, you can share your knowledge to yours fellows and in contrarian. If you still can not understand you can ask your tutor at the end of the class, tutor has their ability to answer your question clearly than the internet can do. In the conclusion, technology brings many befits to education system however, get students a chance to meet a tutor and not giving them mechanical answer helping them lots on their expanding intelligent path.
The curriculum has
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changed
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many
years later. The large numbers of scholars attend to a
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lectures
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now
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a arguments
whether it is necessary or not
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because
of the developments on electrical devices. I will present my opinion in this essay.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the one hand, technology
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help
students can learn at anywhere and anytime. With the
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people
they who faces difficulty to arrange and finding the place to learns
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so
computers and the internet will
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help
them a lot. When a guy has their
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own
free time, they can
easily
surf the internet and seeking the information they want. If you engaged to a
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lecture
not on times you may lose
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some
information,
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hard
to catch up and maybe the
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lectures
is to crowd.

On the other hand
,
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take part
in a
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lectures
can give you more essential knowledge. Even it is a crowd
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class
and you
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have to
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concentrate hardly
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but
it will
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make
you understand
clearly
and received information
effectively
.
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Tutors
have experienced on the process of learning,
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so
they will teach us the pivot grasp, and we not ruin our time for spare.
Furthermore
, you can share your knowledge to yours fellows and in contrarian. If you
still
can not understand you can ask your
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tutor
at the
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end
of the
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class
,
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tutor
has their ability to answer your question
Use "(clearly)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
clearly
than the internet can do.

In the conclusion, technology brings
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many
befits to education system
however
,
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get
students a chance to
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meet
a
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tutor
and not giving them mechanical answer helping them lots on their expanding intelligent path.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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