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Nowadays, job satisfaction is an important key to workers mental health, since most people spend the majority of their time at work. Many factors can lead to satisfactory in a job, but it is also unrealistic to expect all employees to feel satisfied in th v.2

Nowadays, job satisfaction is an important key to workers mental health, since most people spend the majority of their time at work. Many factors can lead to satisfactory in a job, but it is also unrealistic to expect all employees to feel satisfied in th v. 2
Nowadays, job satisfaction is an important key to workers mental health, since most people spend the majority of their time at work. Many factors can lead to satisfactory in a job, but it is also unrealistic to expect all employees to feel satisfied in their career. One of the most important factors can be the environment of work because people tend to feel better when they are in a competitive and co-operative environment. They have the chance to be more creative and develop their ideas, and they can take advantage of a brainstorm with other colleagues. Having Fair policies at work is also considered essential for ensuring the workers that they have an equal chance of being promoted. In addition, a higher wage is something that everyone is eventually aiming for. With the appropriate amount of salary, workers might feel that their hard work is being appreciated and they feel more useful in the workplace. Some workers accept to do the job despite its long working hour, because they need the money for paying the bills and mortgages or just to be employed in some company. Many others do the job just because of its title, social status or high wage. While they do not even feel pleased with what they do, a good example can be a senior manager in a highly ranked company with the hop of being an artist. Finally, I would argue that many people are dissatisfied with their job because of its salary, working hours and the environment. Although satisfactory in a job is ideal, and many factors can lead to that, but we cannot expect everyone to be satisfied with their job.
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, and they can take advantage of a brainstorm with other colleagues. Having
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policies at
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that they have an equal chance of
being promoted
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with the hop of being an artist.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, job satisfaction is an important key to workers mental health, since most people spend the majority of their time at work. Many factors can lead to satisfactory in a job, but it is also unrealistic to expect all employees to feel satisfied in th v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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