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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 3
Consistent with the continuous technological advancement and extensive application of modern science that are made available to the people, education has been revolutionized by new technology to the extent that the lecture is no longer the main method of delivery. In this regard, it is considered that our traditional way of learning, particularly by being physically present in classrooms is no longer significant. While there are a variety of benefits to the new approach of teaching, however, there are also significant drawbacks, which I strongly believe that attending lectures will always hold its importance. Since there are different avenues of acquiring knowledge on today’s era through the internet, people find this more convenient and affordable than spending time to prepare, travel and be present for lectures inside the educational institutions. For instance, making the lessons available online, it allows them to have flexible time to prioritize other things and just go back to the lessons when they need to. In addition to that, schools will need to provide excellent facilities to the students who will need to attend lectures, consequently, they would still need to pay additional fees for those. On the other hand, the new approach will make the discussion less interactive, which likewise hampers the development of students' interpersonal skills. Classroom teaching allows everyone to initiate remarks and further questions which help gain more understanding of a particular topic. In this regard, it is considered as one limitation of online teaching, especially when it is recorded. Moreover, students in the class could still find time to discuss further what they have learned after, share their thoughts and help one another when they find the subject matter difficult, hence developing their intellectual abilities and social skills. In conclusion, modern tools for education greatly improve the way of life, but in my opinion, attending lectures play a vital role to obtain new knowledge and achieve good performance.
Consistent with the continuous technological advancement and extensive application of modern science that
are made
available to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, education has
been revolutionized
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
technology to the extent that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lecture
is no longer the main method of delivery. In this regard, it
is considered
that our traditional way of learning,
particularly
by being
physically
present in classrooms is no longer significant. While there are a variety of benefits to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
approach of teaching,
however
, there are
also
significant drawbacks, which I
strongly
believe that attending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
will always hold its importance.

Since there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
avenues of acquiring knowledge on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s era through the internet,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
find this more convenient and affordable than spending time to prepare, travel and be present for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
inside the educational institutions.
For instance
, making the lessons available online, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
them to have flexible time to prioritize other things and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
go back to the lessons when they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to.
In addition
to that, schools will
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need
to provide excellent facilities to the students who will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to attend
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lectures
,
consequently
, they would
still
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need
to pay additional fees for those.

On the other hand
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
approach will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the discussion less interactive, which
likewise
hampers the development of students' interpersonal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. Classroom teaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
everyone to initiate remarks and
further
questions which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
gain more understanding of a particular topic. In this regard, it
is considered
as one limitation of online teaching,
especially
when it
is recorded
.
Moreover
, students in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
could
still
find time to discuss
further
what they have learned after, share their thoughts and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
one another when they find the
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "subject".
subject matter
difficult,
hence
developing their intellectual abilities and social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

In conclusion
, modern tools for education
greatly
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improve
the way of life,
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but
in my opinion, attending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
play a vital role to obtain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
knowledge and achieve
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
performance.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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