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Some people think that the internet will replace traditional books in the future. Do you believe this would be positive or a negative development? v.2

Some people think that the internet will replace traditional books in the future. Do you believe this would be positive or a negative development? v. 2
With the development of high-technology, the Internet has become more important tool in terms of education and study. According to this trend some people are putting forward an idea that the internet will be used to reading e-book in the future instead of classic books. This essay agree that this change exactly would be positive effect over education system, economy of countries and explain how it will connected these two fields each other. On the one hand, when we look at economic sides, all countries could much more benefit by using the internet services instead of traditional school books. As we know that each year thousands of trees are being cut down to produce paper because of continuing using books. This loop increases education expenditures of countries while rate of rain forest and green spaces that we will need in the future declines immediately. Denmark for example has been first country who passed law regarding using the internet as a major study tool in all educational institutes. According to government reports, they made huge profit for using e-book instead of printing school books and this result can be considered perfect example of why we should pay attention to the ınternet as the most effective item in our schools. On the other hand, the internet has been seen a wonderful place in which they can find all knowledge about their game, homework, entertainment by all students because, as pupils more interest in the internet, using it at education system may be more advantageous in compared to other materials. A recent research, done by Oxford Education Service, shown that students who are able to using the net and computer are as twice as successful in subject than other students who are unable to using these equipments. In conclusion, from my perspective of view it would bring more advantages rather than disadvantages and I strongly believe that we’ll see positive results of this trend in the near future.
With the development of high-technology, the Internet has become more
important
tool in terms of
education
and study. According to this trend
some
people
are putting forward an
idea
that the internet will be
used
to reading e-book in the future
instead
of classic
books
. This essay
agree
that this
change
exactly would be
positive
effect over
education
system, economy of
countries
and
explain
how it will
connected
these two fields
each other.

On the one hand, when we look at economic sides, all
countries
could much more benefit by using the internet services
instead
of traditional school
books
.
As
we know that each year thousands of trees are being
cut
down to produce paper
because
of continuing using
books
. This loop increases
education
expenditures of
countries
while rate of rain forest and green spaces that we will need in the future declines immediately. Denmark
for example
has been
first
country
who passed law regarding using the internet as a major study tool in all educational institutes. According to
government
reports, they made huge profit for using e-book
instead
of printing school
books
and this result can
be considered
perfect example of why we should pay attention to the
ınternet
as the most effective item in our schools.

On the other hand
, the internet has been
seen
a wonderful place in which they can find all knowledge about their game, homework, entertainment by all students
because
, as pupils more interest
in the internet
, using it at
education
system may be more advantageous in compared to other materials.

A recent research, done by Oxford
Education
Service, shown that students who are able to using the net and computer are as twice as successful in subject than other students who are unable to using these equipments.

In conclusion
, from my perspective of view it would bring more advantages
rather
than disadvantages and I
strongly
believe that we’ll
see
positive
results of this trend in the near future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the internet will replace traditional books in the future. Do you believe this would be positive or a negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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