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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. v. 5
Nowadays, people more and more speak each other with help stickers or images because it it faster than write as messages. So this way more colourful and emotional. Although it destroyed relationships between older and younger generation and create gaps bigger. As we have seen society has advantages and problem then using communication with photos. In the one hand videos and pictures become more popular for many reasons. Firstly, it is easier than write text message, a person only puts button one or twice time. It economy a lot of time whatever the time is a value in the modern world. Secondly, then people receive photos, they can show the base issues in other side. For example, my husband very often takes photos of trees, flowers, our children and send them to me and I have felt him better than he writes text because I can see the world through his eyes. In my opinion film and photographs make communication more lively, emotionally and simply. In the other hand, most people prefer speak each other using text messages, especially older people. Often they considered that such way of speaking improves them because if I write every day many times I do it better and more accurate. Also society is worried about using pictures in communication because it follows to enjoy social networks more that real life. For instant, according channel TED younger people, who likes Instagram, speaking throw photos a lot of them afraid of speaking face to face. So there a lot of disadvantages of it. In conclusion, I can say that I agree that communication with photos and films is more exciting and colourful way than written message. People using text rarely than pictures because it has a lot of time and more difficult. Although I think that both methods need. If someone needs to send instructions or answer the question he will use text message. In the case then person wants to share emotion he sends photos.
Nowadays,
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people
more and more speak each
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other
with
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help
stickers or images
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because
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faster than
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as
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messages
.
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this way more
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colourful
and emotional. Although it
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destroyed
relationships between older and younger generation and create gaps bigger. As we have
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seen
society has advantages and problem then using
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communication
with photos.

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many
reasons.
Firstly
, it is easier than
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write
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text
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message
, a person
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only
puts button one or twice
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time
.
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a
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lot
of
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time
whatever the
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time
is a value in the modern world.
Secondly
, then
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people
receive
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photos
, they can
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show
the base issues in
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side.
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, my husband
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very
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often
takes
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photos
of trees, flowers, our children and
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send
them to me and I have felt him better than he
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writes
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text
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because
I can
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see
the world through his eyes. In my opinion film and photographs
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make
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communication
more lively,
emotionally
and
simply
.

In the
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other
hand, most
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people
prefer speak each
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other
using
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text
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messages
,
especially
older
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people
.
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they considered that such way of speaking
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improves
them
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if I
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every day
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I do it better and more accurate.
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society
is worried
about using pictures in
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communication
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because
it follows to enjoy social networks more that real life. For instant, according channel TED younger
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, who likes Instagram, speaking throw
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photos
a
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lot
of them afraid of speaking face to face.
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there a
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of disadvantages of it.

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, I can say that I
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that
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with
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and films is more exciting and
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colourful
way than written
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message
.
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using
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text
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rarely
than pictures
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it has a
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of
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and more difficult. Although I
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think
that both methods need. If someone needs to
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instructions or answer the question he will
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use
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text
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. In the case then person wants to share emotion he
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sends
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photos
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
To have another language is to possess a second soul.
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IELTS essay In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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