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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others. is it a positive or negative development v.1

In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others. is it a positive or negative development v. 1
It is true that in the era of technology, most people all over the world use it for shopping online, working from home and communicating with others. Besides its upside, there it still has some downside that should not be lost sight of. On the one hand, the Internet have virtues in many respects. More and more people utilise it for online shopping nowadays. This could save on time and help reduce traffic congestion during rush hour in big cities. Moreover, many freelancers are able to work from home and students opt for online courses instead of going to school. In addition, the internet is an effective means of communication that allows people to keep in touch with their family and friends by sending instant messages via social media such as Facebook and Whatsapp. They can also make friends with foreigners to learn languages. On the other hand, people still need face to face interactions because there are some repercussions of abusing the Internet. First, virtual relationships on some online platforms might be not genuine. Many newspapers reported about unethical paedophile cases in relation to online friendship. Second, online shopping is sometimes unfit. For instance, it is better to try on clothes before buying. Finally, work in office help staff members to discuss efficiently and avoid misunderstandings. In conclusion, although the Internet brings benefits to humanity, it also have certain implications with regard to lacking personal contact.
It is true that in the era of technology, most
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people
all over the world
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use
it for shopping
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online
, working from home and communicating with others.
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its upside, there it
still
has
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some
downside that should not
be lost
sight of.

On the one hand, the Internet have virtues in
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many
respects. More and more
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people
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utilise
it for
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online
shopping nowadays. This could save on time and
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help
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reduce
traffic congestion during rush hour in
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big
cities.
Moreover
,
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many
freelancers are able to work from home and students opt for
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online
courses
instead
of going to school.
In addition
, the internet is an effective means of communication that
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allows
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people
to
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keep
in touch with their family and friends by sending instant messages via social media such as Facebook and
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Whatsapp
. They can
also
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make
friends with foreigners to learn languages.

On the other hand
,
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people
still
need face to face interactions
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because
there are
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some
repercussions of abusing the Internet.
First
, virtual relationships on
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some
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online
platforms might be not genuine.
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Many
newspapers reported about unethical
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paedophile
cases in relation to
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online
friendship. Second,
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online
shopping is
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sometimes
unfit.
For instance
, it is better to try on clothes
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before
buying.
Finally
, work in office
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help
staff members to discuss
efficiently
and avoid misunderstandings.

In conclusion
, although the Internet brings benefits to humanity, it
also
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have
certain implications with regard to lacking personal contact.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others. is it a positive or negative development v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
237 words
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6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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