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In the modern age, some people think it is unnecessary to teach children the skill of handwriting. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

In the modern age, some people think it is unnecessary to teach children the skill of handwriting. v. 2
The technology development have change human’s life largely. With the invention of computer and the sharp development of typing technology, people seems have no need to rely on handwriting. And handwriting course are in danger of been removed from children’s education. As for me, I disagree with this standpoint. First and foremost, handwriting have close relationship with language learning. When kids entering school, speaking and writing are always the first class for students and they are also the basic skill for learner to continue their further study. To practice handwriting can help children to understand letters or words better, and in a long term, to enhance the comprehension toward culture and language. Moreover, a quick and clear handwriting can help children to express their thoughts more easily. Clear writing helps to identify meanings, so writing skill are still useful for learning. No one will ignore the convenience that brought by typing technology. However using these technics have some limits and disadvantages. Firstly, the computer radiation cause health problems and too much time seeing screen damage people’s eyesight. More importantly, many typing software can correct grammar and spelling mistake so that children will ignore their incorrect using in language if they just learn typing skill. Once a young child established wrong use in writing, it is usually difficult to change. Thus handwriting skill remains essential even in modern age for kids. In conclusion, fluid handwriting is a basic skill to learning, so it is still necessary for kids to learn this course in today’s world.
The technology development have
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change
human’s life
largely
. With the invention of computer and the sharp development of typing technology,
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people
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seems
have no need to rely on
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handwriting
. And
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handwriting
course are in
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danger
of
been removed
from
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children’s
education. As for me, I disagree with this standpoint.

First
and foremost,
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handwriting
have close relationship with language learning. When kids entering school, speaking and
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writing
are always the
first
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class
for
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students and
they are
also
the basic
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skill
for learner to continue their
further
study. To practice
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handwriting
can
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help
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children
to understand letters or words better, and in a long term, to enhance the comprehension toward culture and language.
Moreover
, a quick and
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clear
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handwriting
can
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help
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children
to express their thoughts more
easily
.
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Clear
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writing
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helps
to identify meanings,
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so
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writing
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skill
are
still
useful for learning.

No one will
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ignore
the convenience that brought by typing technology.
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However
using these
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technics
have
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some
limits and disadvantages.
Firstly
, the computer radiation cause health problems and too much time seeing screen damage
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people
’s eyesight. More
importantly
,
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many
typing software can correct grammar and spelling mistake
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so
that
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children
will
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ignore
their incorrect using in language if they
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just
learn typing
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skill
. Once a young child established
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wrong
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use
in
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writing
, it is
usually
difficult to
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change
.
Thus
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handwriting
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skill
remains essential even in modern age for kids.

In conclusion
, fluid
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handwriting
is a basic
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skill
to learning,
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so
it is
still
necessary for kids to learn this course in
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today
’s world.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern age, some people think it is unnecessary to teach children the skill of handwriting. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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