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In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a giant leap for mankind However some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a giant leap for mankind However some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives v. 1
University education plays a significant role in anyone's life. Many people got success in their life without tertiary learning. In my opinion, higher education is compulsory to achieve success in life. This essay will put the light on my opinions. First of all, universities are home of knowledge and talent. In universities, students meet with other intelligent and talented students, which helps them to grasp their knowledge and way of study. Moreover, university learning leads to the overall development of students by organizing various extra curriculum activities. It boosts their confidence and prepare them for various aspects of life. To illustrate, an article published in 2016, in Times of India, showed that successful people have more impressive personality than others because they are also good in other part of life. Secondly, in universities, students can take help from their teachers. Teachers have sheer knowledge and observation. They can teach to solve any complex problem by their techniques and experience in a simpler way. Furthermore, in universities, students make friends, which help them in their coming life. To demonstrate, if one of your friend is in higher post, he can help you in your future life to solve your problems related to their past. In contrast, self studying students' research a lot to solve their problem, which results in the increase of their knowledge. Although, it is time consuming, but they become expert in their subject and get success. Thomas Edison and Michal Faraday are successful people who did not pursue a university education, but they contributed in the world development. In conclusion, university education is not only paramount for people's future, but it is also crucial for the country's future.
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people
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life
without tertiary learning. In my opinion, higher
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education
is compulsory to achieve success in
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life
. This essay will put the light on my opinions.

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First of all
,
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universities
are home of
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knowledge
and talent. In
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universities
,
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students
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meet
with other intelligent and talented
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students
, which
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helps
them to grasp their
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knowledge
and way of study.
Moreover
,
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university
learning leads to the
overall
development of
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students
by organizing various extra curriculum activities. It boosts their confidence and prepare them for various aspects of
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life
. To illustrate, an article published in 2016, in Times of India,
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showed
that successful
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people
have more impressive personality than others
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because
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also
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good
in other part of life.

Secondly
, in
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,
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students
can take
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help
from their teachers. Teachers have sheer
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knowledge
and observation. They can teach to solve any complex problem by their techniques and experience in a simpler way.
Furthermore
, in
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universities
,
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students
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make
friends, which
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help
them in their coming
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life
. To demonstrate, if one of your friend is in higher post, he can
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help
you in your future
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life
to solve your problems related to their past.

In contrast
, self studying students' research a lot to solve their problem, which results in the increase of their
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knowledge
. Although, it is
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time consuming
,
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but
they become expert in their subject and
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get
success. Thomas Edison and
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Michal
Faraday are successful
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people
who did not pursue a
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university
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education
,
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but
they contributed in the world development.

In conclusion
,
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university
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education
is not
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paramount for
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people
's future,
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IELTS essay In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a giant leap for mankind However some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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