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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.5

In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. v. 5
Advancements in the field of Information technology have changed the way we work and how we communicate with each other. Some people think, such developments will have a negative impact in the future, while others argue that, it will make our life much easier. In this essay I will put forth my views supporting the latter argument. Firstly, IT has become an integral part of how we do business today. With the help of IT applications organizations have been able to cut down on redundancies and operate more efficiently. For example, before IT applications like ERP came into existence, organizations had to spend hours cataloguing their data points into a paper based system. Moreover, with the help of IT applications, companies will be able to bring down expenses and this cost benefits are utilized to provide more value to their customers. Secondly, IT has helped make our life's much easier, in terms of our day to day activities. For example, 10 years back people used to spend hours at a Government agency for paying their electricity bill, but today with the help of online applications this could be done within a matter of seconds. Add to this, with the help of online portals, job seekers today, are able to connect with potential employers through web applications like LinkedIn, thus making their life much easier. To sum up, I believe, IT will be an important part of our life going forward. It is only when, people start misusing the system that we see the IT negatively impacting our society.
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negative
impact in the future, while others argue that, it will
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make
our life much easier. In this essay I will put forth my views supporting the latter argument.

Firstly
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today
. With the
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help
of IT
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applications
organizations have been able to
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cut
down on redundancies and operate more
efficiently
.
For example
,
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before
IT
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applications
like ERP came into existence, organizations had to spend hours
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cataloguing
their data points into a paper based system.
Moreover
, with the
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help
of IT
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applications
,
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companies
will be able to bring down expenses and this cost benefits
are utilized
to provide more value to their customers.

Secondly
, IT has
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helped
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make
our life's much easier, in terms of our
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day to day
activities.
For example
, 10 years back
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people
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used
to spend hours at a
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Government
agency for paying their electricity bill,
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today
with the
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help
of online
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applications
this could
be done
within a matter of seconds.
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Add
to this, with the
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help
of online portals, job seekers
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today
, are able to connect with potential employers through web
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applications
like LinkedIn,
thus
making their life much easier.

To sum up, I believe, IT will be an
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important
part of our life going forward. It is
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only
when,
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people
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start
misusing the system that we
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see
the IT
negatively
impacting our society.
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IELTS essay In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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