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In the 30 years the world has seen an increase in immigration. Many people point out the benefits of this, whereas others believe the negatives outweigh the positives. • Discuss both of these viewpoints and give your own opinions. v.2

In the 30 years the world has seen an increase in immigration. Many people point out the benefits of this, whereas others believe the negatives outweigh the positives. • v. 2
In the 30 years, there has been an increasing trend that more and more people choose to emigrate Therefore, some people claiming the negatives outweigh the positives. I agree with this viewpoint. Admittedly, it seems to be true that immigrating can bring plenty of benefits, especially for individuals, Obviously, for those immigrants, when they chose a more risky and the new life they had to communicate with different people and integrate with the local culture, it was a good opportunity to broad horizons and explore more about the world. For example, if people immigrated to other country, learning and using the foreign language to communicate with others was essential. Besides, in most cases, people immigrated to countries where the standard of living was better than that of hometown, This meant that they could stand on a higher level platform and meet more intelligent people, which helped to improve themselves and achieve their dreams However, since everything has two sides, the negative effects of increased immigration cannot be ignored. Life is always awash in uncertainties and may not be as happy and simple as imagined, Living away from familiar relatives and friends, the people who choose to immigrate cannot obtain other’s helps timely, particularly when they faced different types of difficulties and problems. For instance, in a few countries, racial discrimination has existed for a long time, even sometimes, locals may isolate foreigners. Under that situation, it cost time and energy to deal with these issues and gradually used to loneliness Moreover, increasing immigration brought the key curse for the development of hometown-— labour shortage. As more and more people leave their home to work in other cities, it was harmful for the local economy. Because, it produced insufficient labour, low productivity and if the government had not made perfect policies to curb this trend, in the long term, the total output will decline and it cannot meet people’s increasing need. Finally, influencing the standards of living. Overall, although immigrating brought reams of new opportunities to individuals. However, due to it will be harmful to the development of hometown if the trend has not been controlled, the negatives outweigh the positives.
In the 30 years, there has been an increasing trend that more and more
people
choose to emigrate
Therefore
,
some
people
claiming the negatives outweigh the positives. I
agree
with this viewpoint.

Admittedly
, it seems to be true that immigrating can bring
plenty
of benefits,
especially
for individuals,
Obviously
, for those immigrants, when they chose a more risky and the new life they had to communicate with
different
people
and integrate with the local culture, it was a
good
opportunity to broad horizons and explore more about the world.
For example
, if
people
immigrated to
other
country, learning and using the foreign language to communicate with others was essential.
Besides
,
in most cases
,
people
immigrated to countries where the standard of living was better than that of hometown, This meant that they could stand on a higher level platform and
meet
more intelligent
people
, which
helped
to
improve
themselves and achieve their dreams

However
, since everything has two sides, the
negative
effects of increased immigration cannot be
ignored
. Life is always awash in uncertainties and may not be as happy and simple as imagined, Living away from familiar relatives and friends, the
people
who choose to immigrate cannot obtain
other’s
helps
timely,
particularly
when they faced
different
types of difficulties and problems.
For instance
, in a few countries, racial discrimination has existed for a long time, even
sometimes
, locals may isolate foreigners. Under that situation, it cost time and energy to deal with these issues and
gradually
used
to
loneliness


Moreover
, increasing immigration brought the key curse for the development of hometown-—
labour
shortage. As more and more
people
leave
their home to work in
other
cities, it was harmful for the local economy.
Because
, it produced insufficient
labour
, low productivity and if the
government
had not made perfect policies to curb this trend, in the long term, the total output will decline and it cannot
meet
people’s
increasing need.
Finally
, influencing the standards of living.

Overall
, although immigrating brought reams of new opportunities to individuals.
However
, due to it will be harmful to the development of hometown if the trend has not
been controlled
, the negatives outweigh the positives.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In the 30 years the world has seen an increase in immigration. Many people point out the benefits of this, whereas others believe the negatives outweigh the positives. • v. 2

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  American English
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360 words
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