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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family group. Is this a positive or negative trend? v.4

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family group. Is this a positive or negative trend? v. 4
There is a contentious debate about people in the metropolis prefer living alone or in nuclear family to in extended family. From my point of view, this trend is strongly positive. This essay will give some clues to support the assertion. The first culprit leading to this phenomenon is that living one-person households enables people to live in the comfort and freedom as they wish since whatever they do does not influence others. A particular example here is youngster who live alone can stay up late to watch television or hang out with friends until midnight without receiving any complaints. In addition, it is obvious that living solitary can fully enjoy their life rather than be bothered with household duties. Another reason for supporting this notion is that small family often experience less chance of the conflicts. It is undeniable that more people, more opinions, it leads to more arguments. It makes a significant contribution to rift relationship between family members. Moreover, it is easy for the 2-generation family to have family-bonding activities such as shared dinners, shopping, trips, picnic and so on. However, this is a justification for living in a large family is the economic pressure, and face problems. For an instant, my cousin lives an extended family, whenever she runs into troubles about financial or mental issues, she has entire supporting from her grandparents, parents and siblings. It plays a vital role in close-knit relationships. In conclusion, I think living solitary or in small family have more merits than living in a large family as they can live fully freedom and enjoyed themselves.
There is a contentious debate about
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people
in the metropolis prefer
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living
alone or in nuclear
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family
to in extended
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family
. From my point of view, this trend is
strongly
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positive
. This essay will give
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some
clues to support the assertion.

The
first
culprit leading to this phenomenon is that
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living
one-person households enables
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people
to
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live
in the comfort and freedom as they wish since whatever they do does not influence others. A particular example here is youngster who
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live
alone can stay up late to
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watch
television or hang out with friends until midnight without receiving any complaints.
In addition
, it is obvious that
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living
solitary can
fully
enjoy their life
rather
than
be bothered
with household duties.

Another reason for supporting this notion is that
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small
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family
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often
experience less chance of the conflicts. It is undeniable that more
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people
, more opinions, it leads to more arguments. It
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makes
a significant contribution to rift relationship between
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family
members.
Moreover
, it is easy for the 2-generation
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family
to have family-bonding activities such as shared dinners, shopping, trips, picnic and
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so
on.

However
, this is a justification for
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living
in a large
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family
is the economic pressure, and face problems. For an instant, my cousin
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lives
an extended
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family
, whenever she runs into troubles about financial or mental issues, she has entire supporting from her grandparents, parents and siblings. It plays a vital role in close-knit relationships.

In conclusion
, I
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think
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living
solitary or in
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small
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family
have more merits than
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living
in a large
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family
as they can
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live
fully
freedom and enjoyed themselves.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family group. Is this a positive or negative trend? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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